Darien!!! Omgosh. I missed your work so bad! This was just wow.. so amazing. It was very sad & very heartfelt. It made me want to cry lol. But, i absolutley loved it. AND. i loved the ending.. amazing! This was very beautiful. Keep it up, babe.
This is so sad, wish I couldn't relate. I love the way you tell a story with your perfectly chosen words and the arrangement of them. There are so many exquisitely written lines I couldn't possibly pick out a favorite. Really nicely done, Darien. Beautifully sad writing!
Excellent job, it reminded me of a recent story I read.
"When he turned a blind eye to the pain he felt"
Keep it up
just a small tip since I've read alot of your poems, I think you're ready to experiment with other styles.