Comments : Unhappily Ever After

  • 13 years ago

    by Perfect Little Secret

    Amazing, that's all I can say... simply amazing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Aussie

    Lov it! gr8 lesson to teach. both must be in lov to last forever. lov is sad. nice summery in the ending. keep writing:)

  • 13 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    I loved it.

    The tale of a prince with a witch for a princess
    A story where love did not rise and was defeated
    Happy endings are only told in old fairy tales
    But this book of stories tell of tales so true

    ^Definately. Keep up the amazing poems!

  • 13 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Omg!! i love it!! excellent poem....amazing job!!! keep up the good work!

  • 13 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Darien!!! Omgosh. I missed your work so bad! This was just wow.. so amazing. It was very sad & very heartfelt. It made me want to cry lol. But, i absolutley loved it. AND. i loved the ending.. amazing! This was very beautiful. Keep it up, babe.

    BRI.x

  • 13 years ago

    by Melissa

    This is so sad, wish I couldn't relate. I love the way you tell a story with your perfectly chosen words and the arrangement of them. There are so many exquisitely written lines I couldn't possibly pick out a favorite. Really nicely done, Darien. Beautifully sad writing!

  • 13 years ago

    by RJ

    Good work.. Great poem...

  • 13 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    I had to read this a few times to get the message. But the story behind those kinda-hard-to-read words is really good. Keep up the good work!

  • 13 years ago

    by dora

    Omg this was so sad and deep and powerful but the words u used to express urself were so good! neway good job xx

  • 13 years ago

    by ephemera

    "When love had blossomed in romance so young." That's my favorite line. And the imagery is brilliant. I really liked this poem a lot :)

    Astryd

  • 13 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Love is sometimes soo different then what we believe it wil/Should be, and it can ruin your life when unexpected or save you at the same time. kinda like in a fairy tale - amazing write 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by x.Athame.x

    Beautiful, eloquent wording that reaches out and captivates the reader's heart and soul. The metaphor and depth in this piece is exquisite, an overall beautiful and breath taking write. *5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Cherise

    "He fell victim to the evil brewing in his bed"

    I love that line! great poem, it told a great story! great job, keep it up 5/5:)

  • 13 years ago

    by J Lau

    Nice unique style... interesting approach. The poem was well organized and laid out. Good write. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Excellent job, it reminded me of a recent story I read.
    "When he turned a blind eye to the pain he felt"
    -Great Line
    Keep it up
    just a small tip since I've read alot of your poems, I think you're ready to experiment with other styles.

  • 13 years ago

    by Clarissa

    !@#%^&*
    great job! i can understand where your coming from with your emotions..
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sandra D

    WOW... that's like the only word to describe it... i absolutely love the 4th stanza, it's amazing!!

    Forever*Yours

  • 13 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    Great poem 5/5
    Best writeing about lust I have ever read,
    And it flows almost perfect,
    Keep up the good work,

  • 13 years ago

    by azii

    Wonderful job! 5/5
    I really liked this one!
    Keep it up!

    Take care

  • 13 years ago

    by Melissa

    *High Five*

    Definately one of my faves! ;o)