As.........

by Unknown Soul   Dec 30, 2006


As the time goes by
my problems come by

as my tears come down
my trouble rate goes up

as spring gets to finish
autumn promises to punish

as I'm near my star goals at night
i feel sunshine ruining me when it is almost time to fight

as the moon brights at night
the sun becomes jealous and show light

as i dream of you when i sleep
i see myself as the little black sheep

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  • 16 years ago

    by Rick

    I'm guessing that the As.. model to the poem is your basis. You free your self from Rhyme scheme. Not easy to do. How ever the flow was mildly choppy but I will tell you that I couldn't write a poem like that. That style of poetry is beyond me. Well written.

  • 16 years ago

    by Simply Josh

    Great job Hazha. The opposites you used worked well in this and by that I mean moon & sun, spring & autumn and yeah. Anyway well done
    cheers, josh

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A beautiful poem with perfect flow. nice job,
    you are so talented,
    "weshakant zor jwan u nasekn"
    keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by kimara4955

    That is lovely hunni u hav real potentual keep it up
    xxtake carexx

  • 17 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    Good poem agn....5/5

    God bless u

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