Whats left of me...

by TeAr dROp   Jan 3, 2007


You took my hand
And said you love me
And I believe

You show me nothing
Is better than our love
And I trust

I give you my life, my soul and heart
But you couldn't see what you mean to me

What's left of me is broken
Hope and dreams are gone
And you and me are done
And I don't know how to move on

How can you be so evil?
Taking my heart away
I try to cry but no longer tears come
To painful to breath and I feel so weak

Even if I want you back
Inside of me is so dead
What's left of me is broken
And dreams are meant for sleeping

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    This is beautifully written. i loved how you said "What's left of me is broken" it was my favorite line. wonderfully written 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Heartfelt write. I believe the last line should read dreams instead of dream. Other than that, nice job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    This is really a sad poem. Someone must have hurt you really bad. The emotion comes through. Take Care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    There are a lot of grammatical errors in this poem which need correcting. you keep changing your tense within in the poem from past to present. probably better if you choose one or the other.

    also, you have a lot of forced rhymes. if the words don't come naturally, don't edit them. it's more than likely that your poem sounds better none rhyming and the idea still prominant, than a rhyming poem with lost intention.

    i'm not the biggest fan of this poem, however, it's obvious that it's come from the heart. it's obviously relatable and i think it would be a lot better if you just editted those few problems. well done x

  • 17 years ago

    by Rona

    I thought it was sad, but real deep. I liked it! Well, there were a few typos I saw, such as:
    "You show me nothing
    Is better than *out* (our) love
    And I trust"

    and

    "*Taken* (Taking) my heart away".

    Well, I thought I should point those out. Overall this is a good poem! I love the emotions it has.
    5/5