The rhyme seemed a bit forced in this poem. However, the emotion was there 100%. When I read this poem I could see and feel the emotion put into it. I don't know what part 2 sounds like or even if there is a part 2...but it almost seems like part 2 would have a sad ending. Anyways! Loved this poem =-]
Excellent poem my friend. Im a big fan of the way you rhyme. I know there are tons of poem styles but to me the best one's are the ones that rhyme and stay true to a grand purpose or point. You wright your thoughts exceptionally well.