Heylooo.
I really liked this part most "Please, just--
Hold me,
Touch me,
Hug me,
Feel me"

It expressed your feelings well.
Other than that it was a good poem.
The style was different but you made your point.
Well done. =]

I loved this!
Sometimes I'm not much of a fan of non rhyming poems, but I am happy to say that wasn;t the case here.
I thought the repetition you used here made the poem very effective and I enjoyed the imagery and flow.

I could feel the emotions you portrayed in this poem. It was a very strong poem, and i enjoyed how you wrote it. Everything flowed wonderfully together. 5/5

Wow! i can feel you on this poem!!! its really good keep up the hard work!!!

At first I thought it would be awkward without an apparent rhyme scheme, but then once I started reading the poem those fears were put away by the imagry and flow of the poem. Very nicely written. 5/5.

Wow, was this an actual letter you wrote to Jake? I can't get over the almost begging on you knees feeling that I get from reading this poem. Its so beautiful and sad. I've felt this way before and you captured what I felt entirely.

Astryd

What a beautiful poem. If only people would look into the hearts of others. Excellent job! Take Care Cindy

I Love the way you wrote this! Great poem!! 5/5

Very nicely penned. I loved it. The flow was very good. Keep up the good work, You are a talented writter.

Peace, Joe

Im speechless beautifully written the repetition really leaves a impact.
take care
xxHSxx

Wow, emotional poem! verry beautiful!

"Look beyond my body, my face
And gaze into my heart"

Rhese are my fave lines, really deep, also verry comman to hear people ask others to 'look behind the outside apperance' great work
Keep writing
Steph

Whatever happened, im so sorry. it's a good thing that you can write when you have all these emotions. there's SO much emotion in this, i really like it!

Forever*Yours

Aww. It's so sad. Yet adorable at the same time. A lot of guys don't understand what a girl wants and needs from them. They think about the phyiscal stuff, and the girls have a little more to it. You expressed that well in this poem.

The emotion was definately clear and not hidden. You want something from him, and he doesn't realize it. I don't know what else to really say, other than I liked it. It was unique. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Interesting...I had feared that no rhyme scheme would diminish its meaning..however...you did a nice job of using a variance in time by beginning slowly and then suggesting urgency..nice...I liked it 4.5/5

Amazing. there is no other word for it

I give you my all
My word, my oath, my soul

i like those two lines so much
thanx for sharing :)

A lot of emotion in this piece.
Very nice.
5/5

Really? Do you love anybody

Excellent

This seems so genuine. Like you really love him, and the three I Love You's emphasise that. I like the style that you wrote it and how it portrays your wants and emotions. Beautiful descriptions too. I love this, I can relate alot. 5/5

Tammie