Flying

by firexdancer   Jan 31, 2007


Tears pouring down my face
taking away the pain of dreams
clothing light as lace
soiled by the colors of blood
trying to be free

as i finally understand
pain hitting my skin
how to escape this stained land
nothing but a red ocean
I've sunk too deep

choices flying afore my eyes
to stay, or to follow
i think I'll leave all these lies
to discover under the darks shelter
flying is for me

please comment, i know it's confusing, but i just had to write it all down.
luv Gabriella

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  • 18 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Beautiful poem...just 13 and you've penned this one so so beautifully...i did'nt find it all that confusing...the choice of words was superb so was the flow smooth

    Excellent job!
    5/5

    xxPoojaxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Vanessa

    It wasn't that confusing, I understood it, anyways, you did a great job, the flow was great, the word choice was excellent, the emtion was strong, Perfectly done 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Great poem, it was a rad confusing but the overall message was nice

  • 18 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    It may be confusing but a good poem for me is one that i do have to read over a few times to really take it in, wi picked up more of it when i read it the second time and on the third time i understood it completely! great work hun!

    xoxo Lucy

  • 18 years ago

    by honeypot

    Another fantastic poem.

    You write so maturely I can hardly believe your age, i hope that the pain in your words is not the pain that you feel in reality.

    Stay inspired, and inspiring others.

    Honeypot x

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