Take The Plunge

by Momentary Relapse   Jan 31, 2007


Calm and patient he stands
A view from a mountaintop
The edifice of fame
Below the tiny insects march unseeing
Lines staggering with the crush
Beneath his feet the earth shivers
Buffeted by invisible hands
Clothes tear from his body
By unseen claws
Lifting head he stares at a gray pool
Towering stonework piercing the sky
A distant murmur whips his ears
Heart pounding he inches close
Closing eyes he turns his back
Arms raised he's pulled away
Coming closer for the hard embrace

*I'm wondering if the ending should be slightly more detailed...suggestions?

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  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Hey nice poem...though it could hv been a tiny bit better if it ws descriptive 2wrds the end...but it's better off well like this...it's amazingly penned...just powerful in it's own manner....wonderful!kp up de good wrk!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    There can be more detail added at the end. but no need. it might wreck this poem. i loved it just the way it is. i might be the only one that does but i thought this was trully fantastic. in its own sad and succidal way at the end.

    5/5 David

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