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Well i guess even short poems and get to the point, lol it was really good and got to the point 5/5

Ur poem was really awesome and what attracted me the most is that u wrote it in a short way but at the same time it showed ur pain...keep it up:)

I lioked this poem even though it was a little short. It was still a nice poem. 5/5

I really liked it because you put it together well for such a short peice. usually i like rhymes and such but you put this together very well. 5/5

Twas pretty good! You have potential.
My suggestion for this piece in particular is this:

You need some sort of closing... Something at the end that really summarizes it a bit. Or that leaves the reader thinking, 'wow, I get that, and that was amazing...' you know what I mean?

I would offer some good ones if I could think of any, but, in my experience, they have to come from the heart, and they're what really makes the poem good.
You could use a little more emotion, too.

But besides that, I think this is really a wonderful poem! You're definitely on the right path! Keep it up!