In Just 10 Minutes

by Just Lucy   Feb 4, 2007


I don't know how to cope
i don't know how to hold on
i can't pull myself together
maybe I'm just not that strong

life's a roller coaster right
with many ups and downs
well my roller coaster broke down
I'm stuck beneath the ground

my view on right and wrong has changed
everything i was stood for is gone
everything i believed in once I've lost
he did this to me, he ruined my life

in just 10 minutes he destroyed who i was
in just 10 minutes he destroyed my beliefs
in just 10 minutes he stole my judgment
in just 10 minutes he ruined my life

isn't it hard to believe
that something so quick
can destroy so much more
and theres nothing you can do about it

he's ruined my life
because one sad and lonely night
he got desperate and picked a fight
i have no goals in life anymore.

and he might not have known this
thats its a life destroying event
but i wish he had of thought twice
before grabbed and raped me

didn't have enough evidence to put him behind bars
but i wish he did get the slammer
than maybe he'll know what it feels like
to have someone force you into sex!

(C) Lucy Green

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  • 18 years ago

    by Laurenf7

    Wow! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Teria

    First Stanza:
    - I ** [Second and Third line]
    -(,) [End of First, Second, and Third]
    -(.) [End of Fourth line]

    Second Stanza:
    -L** [End of first line.]
    - Right doesn't quite sound very good, but it fits, eh. :/
    - (,) [End of First, Second, and third line.]
    -Down two times? One after another at that? Take out down in the third line, or change second, maybe?
    -(.) [End of Fourth line]

    Third Stanza:
    - Captialize; My, I, and I.
    - (,) [End of First, Second, and Third.]
    - Everything I once believed in I've lost ** ?
    (.) End of last line.

    Fourth Stanza:

    -Capitalize- In[Firstline], I.
    - (,) [End of First, Second, And third.]
    - (.) End of Last line.

    Fifth Stanza:
    -Isn't**
    - (,) end of first second and third.
    -(.) end of last.

    Sixth Stanza: .
    -Capitalize He's, and I.
    - (,) End of first and second.
    (;) End of third.
    (.) end of fourth.

    Seventh Stanza:
    -Capitalize And, and I.
    -(,) After first, second and third.
    - it's**
    -(.) end of last.

    Eight stanza:
    - (,) After second and third.
    -I believe 'than' should be then. but, I'm not 100% positive.
    (.) end of last.

    - - - -
    Quite a sad poem.
    I could feel the emotion, and the pain. I know the feeling, it's horrible. But, life goes on.. I'm sure you know that, too. Things happen and things change; I believe all for the better. At least in my life.
    Amazing poem.
    4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    Hey, I can really relate to you here. We shared very similar emotions. Awesome job, be proud of yourself for letting it out.
    Greta

  • 18 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    I think this would have gone under a better section. however, this was again nicely written. and as for evidence, they'd have to use your body...[inserts the explanation].

    great job.

    and ive read your other poem and i have no intentions of saying stay strong. butttt...
    I'm going to say...
    He is not to ever get in your way. You can still try living your life to the fullest. Accept life as it has been given to you, there was a reason...even if you don't know what it is, and even if you'll never know. There is a purpose. And I'm sure this rapist is dying in a way no one can tell.

  • 18 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Aw. This was very very sad. But full of emotion. The flow was a bit off at times , but was pretty nice. I can feel your pain. It's horrible that men do this. It's a sick sick world out there. ;[

    Beautifully penned, though.

    Bri [x]

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