Past Yesterday .

I chose this one, in desperation of not having to comment another love poem. :P Damn girl, All your poems are love! Wanting something different.

Stanza one-
"Hear someone stepping in,
I rush out to the door.
Only to come to realization;
Who was I waiting for?"
I'm strange, I tend to adore poems with short sentences. I love how they create tension, mystery. And this is exactly what this first stanza did. I loved the question at the end, It shows how your body reacts before you mind sometimes. Thought its simple, It flowed. You don't need to fill a poem with big words. But adding some in, makes them different, and interesting.

Stanza two-
"All that's left is memories,
And the scent of your cologne.
Why wait for your return,
When you're never coming home?"
Again, Ending it with a question. I like, I like. It keeps the reader thinking, and wanting to know the answer. The alliteration in this really helped the words slip of your tongue, I loved that. Again its simple, But you create a story, Which is what poetry is about.

Stanza three-
"Searching all our secret places;
I can't find you anywhere.
The devil took you away from me,
& hid you away somewhere."
I loved the first two lines, The idea of secret places is cute. The repetition of "away" in the last two, I wasn't fond of. Try something like "The devil stole you away from me, & Hid you in the darkness somewhere."
Orrr "The devil took you away from me, & hid you with him somewhere." Just something different you know? I would've liked to see you continue with the questions.. like.. "The devil took you away from me, & Hid you, but where?" Or something to the like again, Just because they were strong in the first two stanzas.

Stanza four-
"I'll admit that I won't accept,
That you've been dead from the start.
I can't bare to face the reality,
That you & I must be apart."
I don't really get any emotion in this, it seems ..emotionless. Like your trying to make it emotional..But it lacks something.

Stanza five-
"So since I know you took the memories,
And that they'll soon decay.
I'm asking you for them back,
'Cause I wanna live in yesterday."
I have to say, This is my favourite stanza of the whole poem. I love it. I love iittt. :] Finally, Emotion..Anger..I dunno.. But I like itt.

Well donee.
iLisaa.
xx

Awww this is cute...who is it for? (if i may ask) its a 5/5 like all your other ones