Wow i really liked this poem. i loved the way you made it rhyme. it was a great poem.
and thanks for commenting on mine
hope to here more from you as you probably from me

Strong rhyming and well written. Good job.

Thanks for the comment on my mine also, btw.

Truly great write , great rhyming, loved your poem

Wow.. your poetry is way better than mine! its awsome, i absolutely loved this part
"whispering in the shadows,
flowers blooming in peeps of light,
monsters in the shallows
voices in a rise of light,
I won'tt sleep tonight"

I like it. great job

Hey dark demise! i love this. great word usage. it's a little trippy like a dream. i give it a 5. look forward to more of your work! -beav

Love this poem. really good words and everything . keep up the good work 5/5

Besides a few capitalizations that don't make sense, this is a great poem. Very powerful word choice. I loved it. Great write! 5/5

marcella

Wow this is really good. it's a very different type of poem that i usually read, so i like it a lot. i think you did really good on it! 5/5

~Kristina

This was good nice work i didnt get it at first lol cuz im a litttle slow but its nice

Hey, loved it!!! the wording was amazing!!! i especially liked,
Morbid Images become a obsession,
Sounds from below teach you a lesson,
Eccentric heart you wish to see,
Cold foe's torment,begging for serenity,
well done bub

much love and many kisses,
bex

Whoa this poem was really great. i mean it. keep writing, this poem was very exciting to read

5/5 David

It seems to always happen like that. you make poems just b4 bed. well i do. this is unique.

5/5 David

Wow, now that was good. I especially loved the last line - a great way to close it. Good work.

Wow! Poems that you write in the middle of the night always seem better than the ones you write when you're wide awake! great job! 5/5

I think this was wonderfully written. Dreams are so bizarre, and you portrayed that well, with strong vocabulary and imagery. Nicely penned.

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Haha, at the end you said it was based on a drean, and all through this poem I kept thinking this sounded like a dream/nightmare. It seriously sent chills down my spine. You are very good at descriptive words, they make your poems more.. well just more. I really liked this one!

Cayce xx

Aw, this is such a good poem. I love the image I got from this. The flow worked so perfect. I've had dreams kind of like this, but I love the way you described it. Good job!

.:CiNdY:.