Thank god

There is fear within
Held captive and cold
I face the world with a grin
Someone had to be bold

my favorite stanza and i feel you i got 2 cuzins in the marines

The very short lines made it seem a bit jagged, but the point you are making is a good one. Those who serve the public with their very lives deserve our admiration, not scorn.

This was my favorite part...

"I walk to the street
Watching out for my band of brothers
This is not an easy feat
Fighting for others"

It flowed really nice. 5/5

marcella

The world is so cold
To hold it alone
I am too bold
I turn to face this world of stone

what a interesting thing that i liked the same part of poem,i was really amazed when i saw,anyway the flow and wording is really great

The world is so cold
To hold it alone
I am too bold
I turn to face this world of stone

i don't think this has as good flow as your others but this is my favorite part! it is still a very good poem,
luv gabriella