The poem sounds like a pretty real scenario of a man driven by revenge.
It has a good flow and it rhymes which is a pluss in my book.
I did not see a point with sacrifice though...

But overall I liked it very much and it is certanly worth at least a 5 =)

Good job=)

Im going to be completely honest, i liked this poem and the idea was fantastic. But, the grammer made it seem very elemental like "no more" and "imma." simple grammer fixes would make this poem soo much better :]

Well i loved it, but do you know wat? i vote too. not like other members. i loved the was you got so many words into each line without me feeling it was too much, just right! so perfect.

5 from me, i vote. David

This is..different. but good & well written. Good job! =] 5/5 definitely. i liked it.
<3

Wow, there's a lot of emotion in this poem. I could really feel all the hate. Pretty powerful piece. Overall it had a an ok flow, some lines seemed a bit choppy. 5/5

marcella

Wow, Smart choice of words, well written very nice,

Okay. I'm going to be bluntly honest. I really liked it.. It was really deep & strong. Very dark. It had a lot of emotion in it. & the flow was okay.

But there is quite a few of grammar mistakes.

I will point out the most obvious ones, to me:

Can't take the pain no more [anymore*]

this god dam war [damn*]
inside me is to much [too*]

It's what Imma do to you. [It’d sound better if you said ‘I’m going to’]

its something I go threw [it’s*, through*]

Imma make you a deal [I’m going to]

It's what Imma do to you. [I’m going to]

its something I go threw [it’s*, through*]

I hope this helps. It didn't take away from the poem too much. But, I did notice them.

Good job though. I still give you a 5/5.

Bri x

^ Ignore all those little messy signs.. Lol, They are supposed to be apostraphes. [sp?]

Sorry for that.

Wow! This poem had much feeling, and just reading it made my skin crawl. It reminded me of an action movie. It had a climax and a beginning and an end, that when they were blended together, a story was created. It mae my heart jump, and it made my heart calm down. It was very well done! 5/5!

Aww wow! this is extremely great! i really like it a lot! the flow was amazing and it was really deep and there was emotion in it! wonderful job! 5/5

~Kristina

That's a very good poem, It's angry, i can tell! but i like them like that. The only thing I can say is capatalize the first letter in every beginning row. And fix the spelling mistakes like Imma. and put in commas.

4/5 Rachel

This is sad! I loved it though! The rhyming was great and it flowed nicely! the whole poem overall was fabulous

This was a great poem, very well written but in this line

its something I go threw
everyday, and now its your turn.

i think u meant through not threw but otherwise it was really god 5/5

This was a really good poem, I liked it, but the flow was off a little bit, I think it could have flowed better, but overall it was a great poem. Your choice of words is excellemt. Your anger also really shines through your words. Great expression!! 5/5
Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Sometimes i just feel like this and especially

I hate you!
I hate all of those that threw
me here and left me here in the darkness.
I will avenge
myself by getting revenge
on all those people that cause me harm!

Wow,i got speechless,Keep this talent up
See ya
LAURA

The anger in the poem is so alive, it is so amazing, the descreption of it,
5/5 (and i will vote.)
the only thing i didn't get was "imma" i would change that, but the rest was amazing.
gabriella

That was amazing. keep it up. i can totally relate to this. great job but there are some spelling mistakes but otherwise keep writing.

That was really good... You can comment on any 3 of mine

Hey that poem is really good....sad but good

Wow, thats good.
shows good format.
5/5.