Fire fire

by firexdancer   Mar 5, 2007


Fire fire
touch my skin
for every burn
is a flower within
each scar you leave
each drop you dry
you give me no reason to cry
consume me slowly
so that i can feel
this beautiful pain, which is too real
cover me with ashes
bury me deep
so that now, i can finally sleep

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  • 18 years ago

    by Nix

    Interesting poem, it is strange but very unique and filed with emotions. Imagery s fantastic and I like your word choice. I really love it, it is so powerful and deep.
    Well done!

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Wow. I really liked the flow to this. And the 'story' was really nicee to read as well.

    [so that i can feel]
    ^^ Suggestion [So I can feel]
    It helps the flow out a bit more. Because I found in some places, some lines were too long for the shorter ones you started off with. Other than the flow in some parts, I thought it was very well done. I liked the theme of it too. 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wow great imagery and discription so far this is my favorite nice job!

  • 18 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    Excellent poem. very short, but well worded. =] i liked these two lines "for every burn
    is a flower within"

  • 18 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    This poem has a definite rhythm to it.

    Definitely tells a story and keeps the readers' interest.

    A great read!

    5/5

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