Bitter wind....

by David   Mar 6, 2007


Bitter like the wind you
Speak to me like I should
Have died with the
Sallow sunrise
I deny you this filthy pleasure
You seemed surprised.

Ive always bent knee
And agreed
To your over-calculated stipulations
And stupid arguments
It is enough now
I am a free child.

I will not be what you try to make me
You try to shape ever inch
Of my somehow defective persona
But this will not be tolerated
I will judge how much I resist your blueprint
By how much I can make you hate it.

Dont ever think that you made me
My only Friend made me
And someday
He will bring me home
And He will be the only one
That can say He saved me.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Very expressive, Great job
    Nice choice of wording used in most parts of the poem aswell =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    Very powerful and intense poem, nice use of imagery and good vocabulary.
    I personally prefer poems with rhyme schemes, although this works without one.

    Hmm, the capitalized h in "He" implies God, I guess that's what you were trying to point out in this piece. If it is, you did a very nice job of implies Him without actually saying it.

    Overall a very nice piece to read, flows nicely right from the start.

    Keep it up.
    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by SweetElectric

    Wow...this is brilliant! i love it!..expressive..and powerful...fantastic!

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