Comments : A Sinful Slaughter

  • 13 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow, that book was one of my favorite read in high school, in my junior year i had to do a 8 pages essay about it, this poem reminded me those days. great job once again.

  • 13 years ago

    by Cayce

    AMAZING! That's one of my favorite books! I don't know what you're talking about this poem was so good! I think this is seriously one of my favorite poems! The flow was very good. I usually like rhyming poems more, because it usually makes the flow better, but i don't think this poem needed to rhyme. I think if it rhymed it would have ruined the poem. So great job!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 13 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    It didnt't really make sense to me. I have read the book. The flow was choppy but I get kinda what you were going for.

  • 13 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    I liked it. beautiful imagery and excellent choice of words! keep it up.
    Much love and many kisses,
    Bex

  • 13 years ago

    by Annabel

    I think this was quite good actually ... you put across what you wanted to very well, clearly - well done! xxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaila

    I think it's good so don't put yourself down about that! I thought the flow was nice and it ended right like it was suppose to nice job 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by robin milford

    Nice poem dear

  • 13 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    I was a huge fan of the book TKaM (for short) I really liked your poem as well. It didn't have to rhyme, but it still conveyed the message and theme of the book. Loved it!

    Ciao

  • 13 years ago

    by Kelsea

    I love how you took a strong book and used it to create a strong poem.

  • 13 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    Great job on this poem.
    I loved it.
    5/5
    take care!

    ~Chelsea

  • 13 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Good book. Good poem. 'Nuff said. *claps enthusiastically.

    Great work, as usual. 5/5, keep it up!

  • 13 years ago

    by ivkr81

    This is the first poem of yours I have read, and I really like it! Its been quite a while since I'd read that book, but I love the poem! There is a stanza or two in the middle that doesn't quite flow with the rest (as if I have a right to comment about that!! :) ), but overall its a very powerful poem that reads really well. Great job!
    *ilona*

  • 12 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Of slaughtered songbirds.
    [[I don't like the description of "slaughtered" here...it's too harsh for what the beginning tries to portray, if that makes sense.]]

    An innocent bird,
    So wrongly accused
    Of taking away,
    A young maiden's youth.
    [[I don't know why, but I really liked this line.]]

    Hm. This is pretty interesting. I liked the topic, save for the last line in the first stanza. The rest is well put, well described and I loved how you portrayed the book here. Nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5