Wow this is a very good poem very very goood =) i would hav never thought of this but the title just makes me sing tht Nelly song *sings* Im like a bird i wanna fly away!!* or somethin lik tht lol anywayz very good poem lol

This poem was written soooo good, I loved it!! Very enjoyable read love love love lol and I love the idea like Bloody Rose said I would never have thought about that and that song does come to my head when reading this too! funny so really good job!

Your writing proceeds your age. This was a very eloquently written poem. The rhyme was nice, and your language was quite lovely.
The only thing I say say for future is try and avoid the common words such as "tears" "pain" "love" "hate" "wings" with a talent like yours I'm sure you can do it. If you feel yourself wanting to use a common word, stop, and look in a dictionary or thesaurus for an alternative (although ensure you know how to use the new word in the correct context).
Keep writing!!

This poem is amazing. the flow & the wording were great! the poem all together was great! 5/5

It's very strange. It's good, but it is in a way very abstract if you are portraying some parts of nature. Beautiful descriptions.

My poem was about how religion and God is suppose to teach love yet humans use God as an excuse to kill people and to start wars.

This poem was outstanding.
Especially for your age.
I didn't expect it to be that great hun.
It was beautifullly penned, and your description through out it seemed flawless.

You did a great job.
Keep it up. :]
5/5

Very cute and very sad. I liked how you tied it in with a butterfly. You choose very strong words for this, it helped strengthen the poem, very good. Your rhyming was perfect, never was forced. Your flow was excellent it never jumped you did a wonderful job on this. This was my favorite part:

Pleading at him mutely as he touches her moist lips
Forcing despairing eyes to remain connected with his
Forlornly reaching for him; tracing a face with fingertips

Great Write

5/5

Amazing

I love the imagery and choice of words! very well written!

Aww. When I was reading it I didn't get it till the end. Though when I saw the title I thought it might be about a butterfly or moth. I was right. I loved it. The words you use are amazing.

Wow, i feel stupid i didn't know there was a catagory called "nature" anyways i love the poem, you put such description into

favorite line:
Kissing her crimson colored lips lightly

loved it, amazing job

brittany (MD)

Another wonderful poem. Keep up the writing. Thank you for commenting and rating my poems. God Bless 5/5
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You didn't add me when you went to my discussion topic.. I added u but I think you forgot to get to that part.... btw.. I r/r/c/ your poems good job

How beautiful! This is a pretty poem with perfect rhyme and flow which is such a rare combination. You truly have talent and I look forward to reading more of your work!
Charisma*

Wow ur poem is brimming with descriptions. I loved visualizing ur poem. Great write n i love the heading. 5/5 worth

Your first stanza
The flow was a bit off at some points
But other than that..
It was perfect :]

Pleading [[at him]] mutely as he touches her moist lips
That didn't quite sound right.
Maybe it should be...
Pleading him, mutely, as he touches her moist lips.

Regretfully freeing a butterfly; whispering I will always be near
Leaving her to flutter to freedom, only one glossy wing glows..

I loved that.
My interpretation of your end was that
It was not really a butterfly
But a metaphor of what letting someone go feels like.

Dear, I loved this poem.
Defintely deserves a 5/5 :]

This is a beautiful poem, although I'm not sure I totally understand the last line. anyway, the writing and imagery was amazing! I loved the line about how her auburn hair was once coveted - the contrast between what was important to her in the moment of the poem and what is on a regular basis (for most of the world) is really vivid. def. 5/5!

Very good

the emotions used here are very powerful yet so delicate

tis awesome!!!!

This is a very beautiful poem. I love the imagery in it. The flow was wonderful also and as I read it I could actually see it in my mind. I could picture the words being read soflty in almost a whispery voice. I have nothing but good things to say about this poem. you are a very talented poet. Keep up the excellent work. I am adding this to my favorite poem list.

Bueatful imagery and great style.
some lines i liked are:
Ruby lips tremble slightly...
well they all are sooo good.
i love the last stanza! AMAZING
and a very catchy title