Are you kidding me?

Your last name is Carter? My last name is Carter too!

But anyways for the poem.

I really enjoyed how you started the poem then ended it in the same close form as you started it. I love how you discribed red as the word 'crimson' (sorry if crimson doesnt mean red.) I like the image you put inside my head of a girl looking at photographs thinking about her past life. That's what this poem draws inside my head!

Great write. 5/5

This is good. it is a sad subject. it rings true of a lot of others i've read that deal with the same subject. this is a bit different than some, though. the descriptions were well thought out. good word usage. the only thing i would change is the last stanza. it kinda kills the flow- and that may have been your intention. if so, it's great. but if not, maybe add one or two more lines. regardless of all of my opinions, overall i think it is pretty excellent. 5 for you! -beav

This poems quite amazing. I loved the emotion. It was so dark and chilling but yet so beautifully sad. I Have no cristism for this because i belive it was truely beautifully written. Well done 5/5~mel

Beatutiful poem. very true. i love how you repeated that one line. 5/5

xoxo kisses

I found the flow a little rocky in some places. The rhyme scheme is very unordinary, I liked it but it made the poem kind of hard to read. The trochaic foot was very well done, it stressed the first syllable (among others) in each line, which gave the poem more of a coppy rhymth, which i think matched your topic very well. I really like the repeatition on this line "Took life for granted; now it's gone in a flash" it seemed to take on a new tone each time it was read. I liked the way you left the end of the poem up to the imagination. Good work.

--Steph

Beautiful poem, alot of emotion, very touching and very sad. Good work!

I really liked the repitition of "Took life for granted; now it's gone in a flash", not only does it have great efftecy on the poem it is so true, and its a phrase that many people can relate to in their lives. I liekd the aliteration youve created in the first stanza, "Reminiscing or regretting?" again its very effective. The flow of the poem was really good, the words told a story, which is really sad yet excellently told. I also liked the overall rhythem of the poem, it was good and when i read it i could see it having a steady beat in my head. To improve it i suggest you use punctuation. Other then that an excellent read, keep them up! xx

The repitition was amazing in this poem, so powerful. your vocab was great and the poem flowed.
i felt as if i was there watching this happen, the story told within this poem was really sad yet so well told.

I liked the repetition. And the flow. Everything. This is a bit different from your recent poems. I don't much like the spaced out lines in your new poems. :/
You had good word choice, and you kept everything together and didnt stay off very far from the topic.

Good job, Bri.

Ian