Loving your poem! I can really relate to it in some way! Keep up the great work! Keep on writing!

Ok this poem is much better. I definitly felt the emotion flowing throughout this and you used much better wording choices! loved the ryhme scheme and how you put this into stanzas. Well done with this ~mel

A good poem, a few touch ups in some parts, but overall very well done.

Try not to use so many periods at the end of each line. Though giving a sense of pause and waiting, overusage of such is more bothersome than poetic. Comma's should be used for the sense of pause and waiting.
(example)
Yours:
The weaknesses and flaws I try so hard to hide..
Are all apart of the real me I keep hidden inside..
update of yours:
The weaknesses and flaws, I try so hard to hide
Are all apart of the real me, I keep hidden inside.

And
But the pain is very intense and all to deep...
should be changed to
But the pain is very intense and all *too* deep
And
I year to belong...to be.."One of the crowd"..
should be changed to
I *yearn* to belong, to be"One of the crowd"

Other than that, the emotion and vocab were superb. Keep writing. ^_^x

Amazing, this was so wonderful. I loved the way you made things ryhme. The flow was a little off but it was wonderfull in all. I loved the phrase "Wanting so very much to just be accepted...
Yet fearing the possibilities of being rejected."
That caught my eye in a single glance. Great job!

Alissa

Hey,
nice poem, I love the way your poem rhymes,
and the second stanza was amazing =)
keep up the good work,
kisses stephanie

Amazing poem!! It sounds like we have some stuff in common! This poem was great.
So much deep emotion...I can't wait to get to the next one!! lol...
~Tyanna~

Ok ill admit you are one of the best poets ive read so far, you are among the top three you are really good 5/5

I actually liked this quite a bit.
I guess it's because most people at some point will be able to relate to it; I like to read poems I can relate to.
The rhyme in this was actually ok... "illusion" and "confusion" was a good one!
On the first line of the third stanza, I think you meant "...a tear seen..."
And on the fourth line of the third stanza, it should be "...all too deep...."
But a good write, quite deep and intense.
Thanks for sharing.

It may seem as if I am carefree and strong...
Going through life as if nothing is wrong..
But none has ever seen the real me..
They only know what I let them believe and see.

this was my favorite part although all of it was well written i can relate to this poem alot i like how you rimed words like illusion and
confusion..i loved how you used so much emotion through out the poem..5/5

I effing love this part
Most often my smiles are real and sincere..
Other times they help hide my secret fears..
I've carefully created a clever mask of illusion..
I wear it now to hide my confusion.
That's also how I feel.
UGH!
Omgzzzz.
This is so great.
I thought I was weird for feeling that.
Lol.

Wow! i can relate so easily to this peice, especially the first stanza.
This is really well written, and the rhyming is really good, but a tad cliche in 1 or 2 places!
still, definatly a 5/5 from me!
Steph.

Wow only found two things off.
"to" should be "too"
And the stanzas could be shortend to two lines, but the poem was awsome! i loved it!

-Liz-
5/5
<3

This poems message was amazing, also i liked the ryhming. Though it seems that you yearn so much to be part of the group...but its just so difficult

WOW I love this poem! I enjoyed every single line! very powerful! flow was good! I love these lines! well penned! well done!

I've carefully created a clever mask of illusion.
I wear it now to hide my confusion.

Ally I think you just set the real you free!
I think she is amazing, very smart , articulate and expressively definative 5/5

So beautifully written!!!
5/5