Someone is Thoughtful...

by Debbie   Apr 15, 2007


The spark in thine eyes left me bleak
It made my whole body feel so weak
Staring through your eyes, made me see
What kind of person truly are thee.

The sweetness in thy smile left me speechless
I want to say a word, nay, can utter less
Thy smile was sweeter than a honey
Innocent and cute like a little baby's

Thoughtful to me, with care so tender
Once, I was feeling cold and forlorn...
You held me in thine arms for the better
And gave warmth to this pathetic soul

I'd thank thee for the care you showed
Untainted love, this I shall always treasure
Afraid to love once again, but this will overflow
A love with no end, it will never be measured.

© Copyright 2006 by Debbie de Lara
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  • 18 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    Excellent poem, well written , very good all the way through , vocabulary was wonderful and flowed great, love your style and always enjoy it , keep up the good work,,,,, your friend Tracy d 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Corruption

    Hey another awesome poem except the second stanza didnt flow quite as good as the other ones but the poem was still amazing good job i think you did a wonderful job on this and thx for the other comment lol

    keenan

  • 18 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Another beautifully written poem you have here. I enjoyed the ryhme scheme and thought it presented great emotion. All your poems are enjoyable to read. Well done on a great new poem~mel

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I like the use of thee, thine, nay, and so. However I'm not sure about the rhyme structure, maybe you could change it a little so it can be ABBA or ABAB, I think that may work better. Just a suggestion. =)

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