Wow, the most powerful stanza had to be

"I wish god would grant your return,
so we could share another day,
A million things you've yet to learn,
A million things I need to say"

You did a brilliant job writing this poem. The flow was superb and the passion was stunning. Even though you used a few fillers, the rhythm didn't falter and you pulled the rhyme scheme off stunningly. Great write. I have no constructive criticism. 5/5

Amazing job with this poem!!! The flow was awesome and the wording was great... And I agree with "Afraid of the dark", that that was the most powerful stanza.. Great job and keep writting!!!! 5/5
~Tyanna~

5/5 excellent poem. it was absolutly perfect. i loved the affection you were able to show through your words and the imagry created. LOVED it. =] i dont know what else to say then wow. *tear*

excellent job. :)

Thats good and sad i like it keep up the good work!?!?!?!

The darkness and I are by your side

That line was awesome
Hopefully you didn't have to go through any of this, in reality or figuratively. Amazing write.

This was a fine piece of love poetry. Its flow was exquisite throughout, and I didn't stumble upon some lines nor felt awkward reading it. One highlight on this poem is its rhythm, in my opinion; it is simply consistent and strong. You did a wonderful job writing this. Well done for such an emotive piece. Take care.
Marian

Beautiful poem, I love how you personalized the sentiment and beauty of the poem at the end with her name, that was a lovely touch. Excellent job!

~jas~

This is a very nice poem, the theme is wonderful and the structure is good regardless of the rather simple poem.

If i had to criticize something it would be the word "sadness" is a bit immature for such a deep topic, and also "god" is a proper noun in this case, and should be capitalized regardless of your religion.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

"I wish god would grant your return,
so we could share another day,
A million things you've yet to learn,
A million things I need to say"

those lines are amazing. so much emotion put into this poem. The flow was great. You did a really good job. well done! take care. 5/5

~Chelsea

Karl,
Wonderful job on this, might I say! The rhyming and flow was superb. You are a terrific writer.
I`d like to thank you for acknowledging my new poem. I am only 14 so I very much like to get all of the advice possible.
Much Love,
Samantha Hollywood

This poem is really beautiful, The emotion was so strong throughout it and you made it flow beautifully throughout the entire poem. Your poetry always amazes me and your vocab stunning. Well done on this. An amazing read. Good work keep it up. 5/5~mel

It reminds me of the love i lost, now once in a while i'll go lie next to the grave and cry, its so powerfull to write about a lost love through death but u have done it wonderfull, i wish the chat room would go on, i miss u karl with every beat of my heart..

Well, great success. You made me depressed, and I guess that was your aim in some small sense. Mary-Beth, is that just a random name? You may steal my gypsy tears if you like, you almost created them with this poem. Excellent writing my friend. x to the..I don't think I can cuss here, but you know what's up.

5/5

Wow.
That was heartbreaking. =[
Very emotional to read & can really start some tears.. Your word usage was amazing & the flow was flawless.

"I wish god would grant your return,
so we could share another day,
A million things you've yet to learn,
A million things I need to say"

^ Wow. That was an amazing stanza. Keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

This was so heartbreaking, and yet so beautifully written at the same time.
I have tears in my eyes...that ending stanza hits hard.
As always, flow is flawless, imagery created vivid pictures.
Beautiful work.

Tears fall disguised with the rain,
Infiltrating the soil you now call home,
My heart struggles to numb the pain,
Sorrow covers me, like a dome

the word dome seemed a little forced, but other than that this seemed absoulty perfect, the word choice was excellent, and the emtion was powerful. I really loved this the last staza was my favorite, 5/5

I wish god would grant your return,
so we could share another day,
A million things you've yet to learn,
A million things I need to say"

Touching lines..heartfelt well penned peice!
Great word choice..u've portrayed emotions well thru this 1...Great wrk!
Kp it up!5/5
xxPoojaxx

And wow.. you're really talented you know! this was a very good poem! very powerful! excellent choice of words! well done! flow was good and as always 5/5! good job!

Well i have to say this could of easily been placed in the sad catagrie of the site. Becuase it is a really heartbreaking read. I dont usually read love poems often but this one holds so much emotion and really affects the reader. The first stanza instantly your telling us your laying next to a grave. This raises loads of questions in the readers mind. Who's grave? What happened? Your vocabulary in the poem made the reader intrested in what you are saying. Mnay people would think this whole idea of crying in the rain is a little cliche yet i think you pull it off brilliantly; "Tears fall disguised with the rain". I liked how you concluded this stanza with a simile. The beginging of each of your stanza's are quite different then the end of them. You describe your sadness of this loss in such a unique way. The last stanza how you worte she was an angel even before she died, this makes the reader remember the angle of death. It makes teh reader think about death. A good conclusion as it shows your emotion and how much you love her. It also tells the reader who has died. Again i suggest you use a more varied punctuation usage. keep writing though. xx

Well i have to say this could of easily been placed in the sad catagrie of the site. Becuase it is a really heartbreaking read. I dont usually read love poems often but this one holds so much emotion and really affects the reader. The first stanza instantly your telling us your laying next to a grave. This raises loads of questions in the readers mind. Who's grave? What happened? Your vocabulary in the poem made the reader intrested in what you are saying. Mnay people would think this whole idea of crying in the rain is a little cliche yet i think you pull it off brilliantly; "Tears fall disguised with the rain". I liked how you concluded this stanza with a simile. The beginging of each of your stanza's are quite different then the end of them. You describe your sadness of this loss in such a unique way. The last stanza how you worte she was an angel even before she died, this makes the reader remember the angle of death. It makes teh reader think about death. A good conclusion as it shows your emotion and how much you love her. It also tells the reader who has died. Again i suggest you use a more varied punctuation usage. keep writing though. xx