Melanie

by Kaila   Apr 17, 2007


Amazingly wonderful,
I know that is true.
And when I hear those words,
I only think of you.

Sparkling eyes,
stare at me deep.
Like they're reading me,
and my secrets to keep.

Luscious lips,
soft and pink.
When you gloss em up,
we get a few winks.

Beautiful smile,
makes me have one to.
Because you smile,
I smile with you.

Chocolate hair,
cascades down your back.
Body and volume,
you never seem to lack.

Put them all together,
and what do you get?
Everything that matters,
in the GREATEST FRIEND YET!!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Superb write about friendship. I am always there for good friends. Well penned.

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Aww.. this is sweet.. i love your style.. all of your poems so far are so simple but still you get all your messages across strong.. this poem was no different.. my only suggestion is that i think you could've spent more time describing the fun moments you've had or how much your friendship means to you rather than how your friend looks :D

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Don't use slang within poetry unless it is a slang poem or song, therefore use "them" instead of "em" Other than that this was a wonderfully written poem that came right from the heart. Great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    "Beautiful smile,
    makes me have one to.
    Because you smile,
    I smile with you."
    this I would have to say is my favorite stanza. The flow was flawless. The emtion was strong
    and the imergery was vividly real. Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Aww... that was so sweet.
    Your imagery was vivid & the flow was flawless throughout the poem. I can tell that you care dearly for your friend. :] Such a cute dedication. 5.5 Keep writing!

    "Beautiful smile,
    makes me have one to.
    Because you smile,
    I smile with you."

    ^ My favorite stanza. Wonderful job!

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

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