Comments : Does your button-down oxford dream of irons at night?

  • It was different, not bad, just different, you are a good writer, difficult to understand everything that you're saying. Keep writing. =)

  • 15 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    It's likie a terminator style ending. outstanding and riveting

    your servant:

  • 15 years ago

    by tyanna

    Ummm.. I'm kind of lost as to what exactly the meaning of this poem is...Umm.. The flow seemed to be nice..I'm just left confused!! If I had understood I think it would've been more

  • 15 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is another great one by you, even i had to read it three times to get the picture. but you have done a great job dude, keep it up

  • 15 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was really different.. I'm not exactally sure what it meant exactally but I loved it all the same.. It wasnt overly long which made it all the better. Nice write.

  • 15 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Very different, I like it a lot. I like poems which stand out for their uniqueness and their ability to be extremely different.

    Nice job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Marcus

    You choose interesting topics to write about and interesting titles
    but I dont fully understand the meanin of this poem
    its good tho

  • 15 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Yeah.. so your kinda obsessed with the whole machine thing.. lol.. its interesting... the flow of this poem is nice and the word useage is good too.. however i dont really understand it that well how does the beging of march lead into the march of the machines.. lol sorry maybe im just really slow :]P

  • 15 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    The poem is GREAT! yeah different..very different...but i loved the subject used..n the vivid description n your choice of words...unique write though..but yet...perfect!

  • 15 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Uhm.. you really write unique poems, I like it. Keep it up man.

    I think it flowed nicely, I really like the originality of it, good job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Interesting write, I liked it, very different from what I'm used to, short and to the point.

    Peace, Joe

  • 14 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow... oh my god, I am speechless... The title caught my attention and the poem utterly impressed me. You managed to say so much within such short piece which is remarkable and this is truly amazingly deep and refreshing, different than anything I've read before. The imagery and profound lines left me in awe. This piece fits my taste for poetry exactly: It's metaphorical and unique, with breathtaking descriptions. I can't find anything to critique here, the message is conveyed in fantastic way. I like how you connected the first line with the ending line, that gave me impression of an endless cycle as a frame to the essence of poem. Overall, greatly written piece, truly memorable, it is certainly going to my favorites.

  • 14 years ago

    by HidinVictim

    Ok i don't know if this is supposed to be humorous but it was to me... the title is great and it kind of made me chuckle through the whole piece... sounds to me like everyones the same, and your saying your tired of it... and i totally agree... 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem has a very deep point to it
    the free flowing words which is no what I will focus on at your request delivers an unrest in the demonstration of mans inability to remain passive it the passion of disagreement, or in least how it makes me feel