Ummm.. I'm kind of lost as to what exactly the meaning of this poem is...Umm.. The flow seemed to be nice..I'm just left confused!! If I had understood I think it would've been more enjoyably..lol
Yeah.. so your kinda obsessed with the whole machine thing.. lol.. its interesting... the flow of this poem is nice and the word useage is good too.. however i dont really understand it that well how does the beging of march lead into the march of the machines.. lol sorry maybe im just really slow :]P
Wow... oh my god, I am speechless... The title caught my attention and the poem utterly impressed me. You managed to say so much within such short piece which is remarkable and this is truly amazingly deep and refreshing, different than anything I've read before. The imagery and profound lines left me in awe. This piece fits my taste for poetry exactly: It's metaphorical and unique, with breathtaking descriptions. I can't find anything to critique here, the message is conveyed in fantastic way. I like how you connected the first line with the ending line, that gave me impression of an endless cycle as a frame to the essence of poem. Overall, greatly written piece, truly memorable, it is certainly going to my favorites.
Ok i don't know if this is supposed to be humorous but it was to me... the title is great and it kind of made me chuckle through the whole piece... sounds to me like everyones the same, and your saying your tired of it... and i totally agree... 5/5
This poem has a very deep point to it
the free flowing words which is no what I will focus on at your request delivers an unrest in the demonstration of mans inability to remain passive it the passion of disagreement, or in least how it makes me feel