Wrestling

That was really cut I was very entertained by the whole poem the story was well done it was a really good start to alot better work in the future. Great Job Plot121

Im also a wrestler at my school. I made it to Regionals this year and barely missed going to state as a Sophomore. But about the poem...

There were so many times where the flow was disrupted in the poem, that it made it almost impossible to follow the abcb rhythme.
For Example:

#1
Because I'm a girl
Because "A girl cannot be a wrestler"
I'll let their imaginations unfurl
I'll let them think what they were

In comparism to

#2
I offer to help him stand
To help him to his feet
The ref raises my hand
It's the end of the meet

You can see the complete difference in the flow of both these stanzas. Stanza #2 flows so perfectly together, where as, stanza #1 breaks up the rhythme and makes it difficult for the reader to constantly read the poem in one fluid motion. If you could make changes to parts of the poem to make it exactly like Stanza #2, i think this poem could be great.

~Bryce

Good job remeber when u made that kid cry? lol he was so hilarious! ;)

Like I said.
Your poems seem forced.
Maybe you can work on that or something.
Sorry. I hope you don't take that personally.
But you're very difinitive.
You explained a lot.
Not many people could do that.
:].
Four/Five.

It was okay.
It wasn't great
It wasn't bad.
Just okay.
Average, I guess.
Nothing caught my eye.
If you're going to use because
It would look a lot better if you spelt it right.
Lol.