Wow that was really moving.

Solid poem, painting a touching scene. Keep up the good work!

"Sea warm water touches tips of my toes,"
^ That line doesn't really seem to make sense to me. It does, but it sounds weird. :\
Maybe something more like: " The warm sea water touches my toes."
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"Feel like you were there,"
^ That line, well I think it would sound better as: " I felt like you were there" Because 'were there' is past tense, and feel is present tense.
OR!
" I feel like you are here," Since the rest of the poem is actually present tense.
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"and in my mouth, there is no sweetness taste."
^ That line would sound better if sweetness was actually the word 'sweet'
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I loved this poem. It had a decent flow, and great wording. Though it had a few minor things that could be fixed up [my opinion], it has great potential, and is an amazing write.
Keep it up, sweetie. :D
4/5

Aww, such a sad poem. I can relate to it.

Really osm poem nice to know i'm not alone keep writing

Very touching, I loved this poem. It was short, and straight up. your word choice was excellent. And the flow was decent. good job. keep up the good work. 5/5

Keep up the good work!

Hey, thanks for the comment, i really enjoy it.
Sleeping Out is pretty much an example of a person that is not sure of what he is doing and everything seems like it is a dream, but sametime he is trying to figure things out about himself and is relationship with someone, then at the end he figures out that he is not dreaming and everything is fine.

I really enjoy your poems, i cant wait to seen new ones up, keep in touch.
-Bryce

Great poem! one that many can relate to.. Keep up the good work..

Short but it got the message across.
It flowed well and the emotion was shown
Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

This 1 is greatly penned!...another touching peice from u!!yyour feelings n thoughts were very clear in this 1!!short n yet nice!
Kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

WOW! that was powerful! I love it! great imagery! the flow was smooth!

I love these lines

Kissing me softly, taking my pain away,
But a little tear running down my face.
and in my mouth, there is no sweet taste.

Well done! I'll give this a 5/5!

Vision in my mind again!! Moved my emotions too. I adore this one. XD

"You were never strong enough to fight.
Earth cries the most painful tears tonight"

this is my favorite part, because you are using earth and making it able to do something in a human like form and it takes realt talent to do that

Ah now this is my favourite poem by you so far. well done and keep writing, these poems are getting better.

5/5 David

Ah, another wonderful poem you
have written. YOu are an awesome
poet. Keep up the great work.
God Bless 5/5
Thank you for the rates and comments.
<3tay(^_^)

This was very powerful. It had a strong message to it and was simple and short, yet to the point you wanted to make.

The word choice you used was amazing, and it's very easy to read.

It also keeps your reader's attention, which is an important thing.

Keep posting, and thanks for letting us read your stuff! =)

5/5 definitely!!
~Ally~

This had great images that came with it and I think that you expressed them amazingly. The flow was really nice and fit the style of the poem. Never stop writing!

Alyson

This one was short and too the point and i liked that feature about it it really made the poem better than it probably would have been if it was long, another great poem

Wow, a perfect short poem.
very nicely written, as always your poems never disappint me with wonders. you are so great. keep it up