Were You There?

by HopefulxRomantic   Apr 23, 2007


I was hurt, I was crying,
You were there, you were there.
You had caused me to suffer,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was bruised, I was beaten,
You were there, you were there.
You poured salt into my wounds,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was down, I was lonely,
You were there, you were there.
You just walked away from me,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was pained, I was bleeding,
You were there, you were there.
You were holding the dagger,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was put into prison,
You were there, you were there.
You had testified against me,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was cold, I was homeless,
You were there, you were there.
You kicked dirt into my face,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was weak, I was dying,
You were there, you were there.
You had stood there, laughing,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

I was killed, I was murdered,
You were there, you were there.
And you could have stopped it,
Did you care?
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
You should care.

Now I watch, and I see you,
I am there, I am there,
At least now you regret it,
Now you care.
And the creed and the colour and the name shouldn't matter,
Could've cared.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Of Sweet Insanity

    THis was a phenominal poem and it really spoke to me. I saw through the words and into the reasoning and it left my in awe. Keep writing Danny!

  • 17 years ago

    by HopefulxRomantic

    In truth, the poem is similar in rhythm to the hymn, but the other lines are not identical sans the two I purposefully changed. "You Were There" was originally "Were You There", and small changes like that have been made to the original.
    HxR

  • 17 years ago

    by sibyllene

    For a poem that only had 2 new lines per stanza, this was fairly engrossing... that must be saying something. It definitely put me in mind of a song format. The repetition could get old after awhile, but it also has a nice, ceremonial feel to is, as if reciting verses. Which is something I thought was cool., and unique! : ) Write on...

  • 17 years ago

    by HopefulxRomantic

    How painful it is to be downtrodden.
    This is a taken from a popular hymn sung in schools to teach about prejudice. I used this song from the back of my mind as the structure for this poem.
    I appreciate any feedback whatsoever, as always.
    HxR