This Chunk Of Metal Holds Great Power

Hmm...
I don't know what to make of this poem.
It's mysterious, tells a story but is not a story, I think it's great.
Although you should find a synonym for power.
Erase the one on the second stanza.
It just doesn't really flow well when
You add "power" into it.
Otherwise.
It's good.
It's not great, though.
I don't know.
Something just seems missing...
Still.
5/5?

I liked it, it showed true feelings. it ended having me thinking what u did, which keeps the reader guessing. i just wasnt too sure about the flow. the first few lines also had me guess about the chunk of metal, i wasn't sure what u were talking about, but then i read on and it made more sense. overall i really liked it, 5/5

'Away from hear'

I think you mean 'Here'

Anyway, I like the moral of your poem because, your right, so many bad things happen in this world that many of us are not aware of and whats worse, we don't realize that we have the power to stop it. Sometimes we think the only way out is to end ourselves. Great write. 5/5

Ah it was wonderful! I really love the title. At first I read the title I was like...okayy. But I just love how it describe a gun once I read through. That was awesome. The whole poem was described in your title. Awesome. The poem itself was great. The flow was well done. Rhyming poems aren't really my thing but you pulled it off. Nothing wrong I could find. It seemed to be well penned.
God Bless 5/5
<3Tayy ^__^
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I enjoyed this poem, but I'm not sure, but I think the flow is off in a couple places I had trouble reading it, but maybe it is just me, other than that I really liked it! Nice job! :D