When I see you.....

by christina   Apr 30, 2007


When I see a leaf
I see it in your eyes
When I see a rose
I see it in your hands
When I see a waterfall
In it, I see your heart...
Beating as fast as mine
When I see you
I fill like a million oceans

Your eyes as
green as a leaf
Your hands as
Gentle as a rose
Your never ending heart
Beating as fast as a waterfall
As beautiful as one too
By,
Christina J. (cej8888@aol.com)

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  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    I think this is a good poem but has the potential to be great... the second stanza is almost the same thing as the first.. its good that you went back over the original ideas but you should add moret o it.. try adding more descrptions to make the image more vivid and try adding more detail.. use every emotion you feel when you see this person and write down as much as you can to describe so that the reader really feels how you feels and understands how you feel inside

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    This was a pretty poem. i like how you repeated the waterfall, sky, and rose. its a nice way to say i love you.

  • 16 years ago

    by Darlena

    W0W ! Y0U`RE 0NLY 11... THiS P0EM iS CUTE. THiS iS A GREAT START.

  • 16 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    This is a cute poem...your writing will get much better with age, but this is a great place to start! This is the best of your poems in my opinion! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    The first part didnt make much since until I read the second then it all came in to focuse good Piece I liked it Plot121