You Eclipsed By Me {Rondeau}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 1, 2007


This is about a lover promising his love until the end of time... Yeah.
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As stars die amoungst the sky and the sun melts into the land,
And even when tomorrow doesn't come, know I'll still hold your hand.
Even tomorrow's forgotten mistakes will take their heart's lend,
I'll bring you close and dear to my heart until tomorrow's end --
Love is the death of individuals and it can't be planned.

We'll seek the stars and so much more with a pleasure we can't stand.
We'll share this sea of gracious love and let it go unplanned.
We'll hold our hearts so dear, for themselves they cannot defend.
....As the stars die amoungst the sky.

As stars die amoungst the sky and the sun melts into the land,
We'll seek the stars and so much more with pleasure in our hands.
A starry night is quick to subdue, but I didn't have the slightest notion's lend,
But we'll hold on tight, for I didn't know I could fall into the ocean's defend.
Love's beautiful, like death. Though it may die, I'll teach you to stand --
....As the stars die amoungst the sky.

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A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a
sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a
refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the
same metrical length).

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  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Now this poem, has it all depth, strong emtions, amazing flow, well penned. I absoultly loved it, and the meaning behind it. You are truly talented, so please keep writting, so i can keep reading 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by honeypot

    I like this poem, and I like your irony amongst the romamce, like the fact that love cant be planned and is the death of the individual.
    Very deep thinking - I like poetry that makes me think.
    Well done, nicely written and full of emotion x

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Wow.
    This is beautiful.
    I was wondering...
    Where do you learn all these
    Formats of poetry?
    You're pretty good, I have to admit.
    I think you belong in like
    The olden age.
    Along with Mark Twain and Shakespeare.
    You guys just sound so smart.
    Lol.
    I hope you take that as a compliment.
    Other than that.
    5/5?

  • 17 years ago

    by Cherise

    "We'll seek the stars and so much more with pleasure in our hands."

    I adored that line. Your really great at writing, i belive i told you that before. This poem was very written and was a love poem, but it was so unbearably sappy. Great job on this one