When

by RavishingEruption   May 4, 2007


When Tears have fallen and Hearts have died
When inner Pain has finally Cried
When Time is over and Love is lost
When Hope has vanished and turned to Frost
When People leave you all alone
When Friendly hearts have turned to Stone
When Dreams have flown away from you
When you have to change your View
When Words can fly and cut like Knifes
When your hardest effort has changed no Lives
When things don't go the way you Plan
When your legs can barely Stand
When you Hurt so bad you're Numb
When your Hungry for a crumb
When you are alone Inside
Look to me and you can Hide.....

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  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Awww this is such a beautiful poem.. it sounds more like a friendship poem..

    I like the repetition of WHEN throughout the entire poem.. it was really interesting to read because as I was reading I was wondering what the ending was going to be like..

    and you ended it perfectly.

    Amazing job once again. You are very talented. 5/5 =)

  • 16 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    This is a very intresting poem. i havent yet read a poem thats in this fassion. but i like it alot. the way u was tryin to get a point across was really neat. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lozbi

    When you have to change your View
    When Words can fly and cut like Knifes

    really like those 2 lines
    and the last two lines brang tearz 2 mi eyez
    vry touching
    great work
    .x

  • 16 years ago

    by Christy Redding

    Now that was gr8,, i loved it

  • 16 years ago

    by Corruption

    This is a amazing poem i love the way you started every line with when though sometimes i got mixed up on what line i was on lol but good job

    keenan
    ps could you maybe check out my new poem red paint??

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