Hmm i believe i have met this demon...love the way you described him...and my favorite part is "He is the reason children cry out at night
He is the first sign something isn't right
So instead of turning a blind eye his way
Try listening to what the abused, have to say"
i wish someone would have listened to me when i needed them too...very good poem 5.5

It's good! I'm wondering, though, do you always write rhyming poems?

I find rhyming poems rather difficult to write. I prefer free-form, cause there aren't limitations. And, I was wondering, since you have such great use of rhyme in this one, how you would do if you had even less constraints?
I bet you'd be pretty freaking awesome.

=]

Wow, i loved it.
The visuals, the rhyming, your vocabluary.
Just flowed wonderfully, and all fit together beautifully. I loved it, well done XD

Amberinaa*

What a amazing poem. this poem is on top
of my all time favorites. I would kill to be
able to write like you. never leave the key
board. tAKE A PEN AND PAD WITH you.
everywhere you go. what ever you put down
i will read and love, i put you on the section
where it saids fav. poems on my page and it saids you are on there put when i go to read them they are not there. I hate this site. I trhink im going check out < allpoetry.com>
that site looks cool
cy

I agree with the others, this write was completely perfect. It has to be one of the best dark poems that I have EVER read. Purely fantastic. The flow was flawless & the emotions were strong. Simply wonderful job! Keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Wow i just wrote that cocaine one and there
was your already thanks . like isaid earlier
this poem wowwwwwwww i don't even
have words you are up with koriey gracie danielle and jamica they are all outstanding
cy

I thought that was really good, i really liked how you made the abuse a demon, how you put a character to that. it was really a good read, i loved it wonderful job.

Very good poem. I really liked it and I think that people should liston to it's message. Keep up the great work:) Another 5/5.

Hey,
nice poem, the flow and rhyming is done great, i enjoyed reading it, and i didn't expect the ending, good work 5/5
kisses stephanie

This poem has a very nice flow, and is really well written. Good job.
Kelsea

Very good poem, I really enjoyed it, keep up the good work. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

Excellent poem great flow,very sad and very well written, again a pleasure to read ,well done 5/5
your friend Tracy

This is scary.
Like kind of freeky maybe it's cause I'm alone.
I don't know lol
But Anyways this poem deffinitly gave me chills
which was good for the poem but bad for me lol
Nice use of vocabulary
Great job!

A really dark poem and i loved how you describes this "demon". You make it seem as thought its some monster or something, and in a sense he is a monster. You had a good rhyme scheme going on, thought i felt some parts of the poem the hrymes didnt work. The flow was good, yet a little sketchy at times. But i liekd your use of aliteration in htis, "crisp and clear", "demon, is dreaming" it gives the poem this feeling to it. The poem as a whole was quite dark and sent shivers down my spine. The end of the poem was good, it was very true and sent out a great message. The structuer of the poem was good, try using puinctuation next time though. Thank you for your comment! xx

Fantastic!!!
The metaphor you've cleverly portrayed in this poem makes this write truly original.
The line "He feeds on your fear, drinks in your tears" has a great description, it actually made me want to read that stanza twice.
I'm normally not keen on rhyme, but I think the rhyme and meter in this was spot on.
Well done, no criticism from me for this one!!

Wow i totally loved this poem very good and very well writteen :) Keep up the good work 5/5

Very deep and intense picture this paints for the minds eye. Imagery is excellent.

You ask what he is, and who he wants
He is every memory that is to haunt
Those broken, scared, alone, and bruised
He's the unheard voice of all those abused

This stanza really stabbed at my heart.
Excellent job!
take Care Cindy

This poem is amazing. I loved it! Keep writing. Your work is great. 5/5
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That is just amazing.....

You are really powerful at writing poems like story
And you do it really well..i noticed that
You really created an image just like others and you made them grow into the minds
Well done
Laura