The Sun [Rictameter]

by BeautifulxMess   May 6, 2007


The Sun
Shines The Vast Land
That Seeks Beyond The Hills
Where Mountains Cast Along The Shore.
Powerful And Mighty She Lights The Earth.
She Sits Upon Her Throne And Gapes
At The World Below Her.
None Can Overpower
The Light Rays Of
The Sun

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  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Love it, better than the last one i read. Wonderful descriptions, it fit the style perfectly

  • 18 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I didn't like the fact
    That you capitalized each word.
    It just doesn't look right to me.
    But other than that.
    Wonderful.
    You make the world realize
    How beautiful the sun is.
    It kind of weird, though.
    I saw this poem as the sun is the "she"
    And she is powerful.
    But I also interpreted it as
    You are the sun.
    Lol.
    I don't know if you were trying to do that.

  • 18 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    (last line) The Sun.

    That's the only thing I suggest that you change.

    Other than that, this poem was SORT of powerful. It wasn't as strong of an ending that I expected it to be, kind of a disappointing end, but it's wonderful. Also, the title should not be: The Sun[Rictameter] it should be The Sun [Rictameter]

    Good job, and wonderful... What Happened to 1, though. It starts at 2.....

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

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