This house

by Stephanie Naylor   May 13, 2007


The walls, black
the bare floors

no mirrors
or windows

just one door
and two rooms

no food
or people

so alone
and desperate

everything empty
like my heart

this is the life
that i am forced to live

don't judge
until you have experienced it

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  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I couldnt see much point within it, but i am sure there is some. It was too short for my liking but i did enjoy it, because it was different
    love Tara-Kay
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    I did not really like this poem. It was short, choppy, and for such a short poem I would expect it to have precise capitalization, punctuation, and syllabication... but this was absent in this work as well. I was not impressed by this, because it seemed like just a few lines put together to create a poem to increase your vote count, or something along the lines... I don't know what it was with this poem, but when you write a poem, you can tell if someone has put their heart and soul into that poem and this just didn't strike me as a poem you put effort into.

    Hopefully, you will improve as time goes on,

    Best of wishes,
    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Descrtive, and deep. Youd di a great job, it keep me intrested, and the flow was great.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by bleeding limegrenn

    Umm it wuzz good it could be a little bit longer butt yehh 4/5:)