All alone

I like this one its short but so descriptive & thanx for being honest about my poem i really appreciate its kinda funny cuz i thought the same things about u did i just couldnt think of a way to fix it

Heyy im not goin to point out errows cuz its ur writeing n im bad at spelling i love the poem awesome job

"it(')s drawing me closer" -- to what? And/Or, where?

"like the tears i once [cried] [myself] to sleep with"

Lightening = Lightning

Existingly, this work is in an unsystematic state. First, the title is rather incongruous to its contents. Second, the substance is jumbled with incoherent themes. A revision of this piece is rendered necessary.

The flow was a tad off
do to the shortness and longness of your lines
but the message behind it was good
so nice work

Well done...