I think I carry a torch for her

by Fsams   May 16, 2007


She is really very nice
With two little charming eyes
A short pony hair so nice
And a visage as clear as ice

She is really stunning
Obviously not cunning
She's short and elegant
Industrious and diligent

Like she is beautiful
She is also dutiful
She isn't a pessimist
Obviously an optimist

I'm chuffed about her talks
Spellbinds me when she walks
I like her like my mummy
For being evermore chummy

Whenever I see her, even for a while
She speaks to me with a lovely smile
I think I carry a torch for her
I've never felt like this so far

Written by Fsams
06/06/2004
19:30

Grammar point: "Carry a torch for somebody" means to love some one even if he/she doesn't love in return.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't now what but something is very funny in this poem. It is interesting. Your emotions in this piece reminds me on one my friend. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jiyaa

    Wow this is another beautiful love poem. I love the lines

    Whenever I see her, even for a while
    She speaks to me with a lovely smile

    5/5 all the way

  • 16 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    This poem was beautiful, though it seemed a little choppy and the line

    "A short pony hair with no lice"

    took away from it, and I also think the third stanza could use some work. Other then those two areas, the flow was well done and the wording was incredable. Great job!

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Your poem is nice. I think u must try revisin the lice line. but its a great poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very nice poem. The only thing I would change would be

    A short pony hair with no lice
    maybe you could try "nice" instead of "lice"
    because you make it seem like all other grils have lice.

    I did like the poem after that line. 5/5

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