Wow, amazing love poem...beautiful and simple and very well written...it had a surprisingly nice flow to it!

----tara

This was very sweet and touching in some way. nice job 5/5

Excellent wording. I'm very impressed with your writing. I wish I had what you wrote about, Lol.
Keep these lovely poems coming.

Alesia

Beutiful poem...perfect choice of words...simple..yet sweet n nice!
Good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

I really love this poem because I do this all the time, it's amazing how differently things look and feel when you actually take the time to notice and appreciate them. Excellent write 5/5

I loved the descrptive word choice, it painted a vey peacful picture in my head. The emtion was a little dry, but the flow was good. well done.

I loved the descrptive word choice, it painted a vey peacful picture in my head. The emtion was a little dry, but the flow was good. well done.

So sensitive and simple. Very nice

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

Again the discription was great. The word choice was simple but worked nicely throughout it. Good imagery. The last line was great. I enjoyed this. Well done~mel

You use such vivid descriptive words that I can actually picture this scene in my head. thats amazing, the poem was amazing, and you are a amazing writer. keep it up. 5/5

Good piece with a nice flow. U like free verse poetry i guess. Well 4/5 k tc

Aww very cute
it kind of reminds me of this scene in my book i love it now you made me want to go read lol nice work keep it up!

The second stanza got me a tad confused. As he holds and kisses her what? As starts a sentence when there is going to be something following. As in...As he kissed her she couldn't help but to smile. You did have a sentence afterwards but if that was a part of it they should have been in once sentence together. Ya know? It just threw me off because there wasn't anything until you got to the next sentence.
The last stanza has a similar problem. I thought it would sound and look better if there was a comma before while making it one sentence.
Either than that stuff it was a decent poem. I'm not one for love poems though. They usually bore me because they tend to use the same words over again and reflect a lot of other love poems that look just like it.
Sorry I'm bashing on your poems. I'm sure there's one in here I'd really enjoy I just picked the ones that I guess just don't suit me. :/ 3.

I love this poem although I guess I would have to call it free verse because I don't see a rhyming scheme... anyway, good imagery and I liked it very much. :)