Drawn To The Light Like Flies

I'm from NJ and I know what you mean
I lived in NY for a few weeks
Stay out of the alleys, stay out of dark corners, stay away at night lol
True. 5/5

This is a really wonderfuk poem, almost frighteningly realistic. It struck me with awe how true everything here seemed to be, painful even how terrible the city can be. But the city lights do draw a lot of people in, people dreaming of a better life.

I absolutely loved the three middle stanzas:

"See that girl on the corner
She sells herself and gives them sex
Shes dressed nice and seems so happy
But did you know thats shes depressed?"

^A prostitute, you immediately understand what it is you're talking about. They probably do make a lot of money but then you go on to say that she's depressed. Maybe embarassed that she has to resort so low. A very true diction.

"See that guy with the nice car
He sells drugs to kids for a living
But he lost his best friend to his boss
And himself he has never forgiven"

^Next you go on to talk about a guy. He may seem ordinary a nice car, just driving along the dark streets. But the money, came from selling drugs and ordinarily doing somehting like that is dark business. People die, and people disappear and that's how he lost his best friend.

"Now look at the homeless guy
He's just sitting there, by the wall
The drugs and city lights blinded him
He now has nothing, he lost it all"

^And then there's the underdog, someone everyone takes advantage of, and because of the city. Because of where he chose to be, where he tried to dream he lost everything. No money, no food and no home.

This was a painfully true piece, and you were able to tell us exactly how you felt about it. No sugar coated words, it was just the plain, straight up truth. Beautiful. 5/5

Beautiful poem!
we pass by thousands of strangers each day but we never get to understand y they r how they r or wat their story is. we simply pass by.
loved it! 5/5!

This was a poem showing the downsides to life 5/5 well done, keep writing and this is going in my favourites

~NinjaGirl~

Your poems are so great and full of real meaning. you are a talented person. keep it up