Love: A Natural Disaster

by Zeus   Jul 13, 2007


She blew me away like a hurricane wind,
Blinded my sight like the rays of the sun.
Her eyes gleamed like a star in the night,
This beautiful girl, to me, was the one.

She danced as if she were flames,
Her body swayed like leaves;
She was the beauty of nature,
Or so she had me believe.

She was only a dessert mirage,
The oasis that looked so nice.
It turns out she was a wicked blizzard
With a heart of the blackest ice.

She made it rain on all my dreams,
And seemed to be a beautiful star,
But she dropped a boulder on top of my world,
And left a crater, my eternal scar.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Steady Stereotype

    This poem was absolutely magnificent. The flow and rhyme were absolutely perfect, making it easier to read. The emotion while not directly expressed was easily understandable through your creative metaphors.

    "But she dropped a boulder on top of my world,
    And left a crater, my eternal scar. "

    ^These two lines really stood out for me. It was a perfect ending to this, the way you were still able to relte to nature in describing how she broke your heart. How it would remain there, hurting forever.

    A fantastic write. Well Done x)

  • 14 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    This was a very well sentimental verse that captured the readers heart. Fantastic write, but like my other comments, I'd like to see punctuation in this piece. Other than that, this was an outstanding write. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This poem was so clever. Everything about it was great. The imagery is perfect and made what you were feeling so clear. The words you used were simple but powerful at the same time. I think you did a lovely job with this poem. Can't wait to read more. Nik

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a beautiful well written poem astromomiical imagery and excellent flow

    intense passionate romance

  • 16 years ago

    by Xxcrazy4UxX

    Absolutly, well they all took my words that i wanted to say... you write such cool poems..

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