Great poem wonderful flow and spirit it is very well written good job

keenan

Wow!!...great poem.....with good flow and a great meaning.......such beautiful messg portrayed in a great way
Great write
5/5!=)
xxPoojaxx

I quite like this, it's rather sweet... in a somewhat sad way. I couldn't help but feel some of the words were a little bit forced though.

Overall - nice job.

This was a pretty good poem... It can make one wonder about life... Some rhymes were a bit forced but despite its still a very well writen poem

Good job =)

This was quite a good read. The emotions portrayed was good and the flow nice. Some ryhmes seemed a little forced other then that this was an enjoyable read. Hope you do well in the contest hun. ~mel

I liked your first stanza.
Although your ending didn't make that much sense.
I know what you're saying, it's just that
It just sounds weird and forced.
I think you should reword it.

Second stanza?
Same as the first one.
Only more forced, and your wording?
Weirder.

Third stanza?
Wonderful, dearest :]

Fourt stanza seems kind of forced as well.
But this time, I think it's just me.

Also dear,
Watch your punctuation.
I notice that at some parts needed them.

I loved your last part.
I didn't care about the flow in that one.
It just felt... true.
Powerful.
Love it.

All in all, it was an okay poem.
It wasn't perfect.
It had good and bad in it.
4/5?

That is amazing. I love this poem. The depth behind it is amazing. The flow and word choice is great!!!! I love the message. Live Life to the fullest. Great Job!!! 5/5 from me for sure!! It is amazing.

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Very nice poem. I give it a 5/5.

This poem is awesome

I certainly adore this piece for it endears me completely regarding Life.

"If the time has come,
for me to leave this place
Then I hope to become,
one with the space."

^ Believe me, that is how I feel too. I wanted to be one with the Infinite Universe if the sand of my time have depleted. Can't [great] minds just think alike? (^^,)

"Remember the good things,
maybe we will meet again
You never know what time brings,
and when."

^ This definitely made sense to my knowledge of the Truth. Perhaps on the next dimension or existence we'll meet, well who knows? I really like that! =D

Nice work, nonetheless, my dear!

-Debbie Cakes

Wow.
Amazing poem, once again.
I really liked this one, espeically the ending.
The flow was a bit off here and there.
But, overall it was a good poem.

Great poem ,good wording and the flow was very good, sad and the heart felt feelings , loved it, great job, keep it up ,your friend Tracy~5/5~

I think thats what makes life so amazing and fun, that no matter what we never know what the future holds, everyday is somewhat of a surprise. Excellent job 5/5

Hi,
first of all i want to congrats you that its such a nice poem. it touched my heart. its very real and purte words you have used in this poem. and truth feelings. you realy know what is true love. great job.

i will must give you must 5/5

its my favouriteRemember the good things,
maybe we will meet again
You never know what time brings,
and when.

This is also really sweet, i like your writing its refreshing. =]
Geo

This was written so beatifully...I was hooked on the first stanza...Congrats...I hoped you won the contest....5/5

So if I'm not there the next day,
remember how I used to be
How we used to play,
and swim in the sea.

Beautiful rhymes. 5/5 worth and you got it. I like the flow and your wordings.

Nice work! It's amazing how you think about life =) Keep it up! 5/5

Very good poem, my favorite part was the begging because u came off strong so that pretty much hooked me for the rest of the poem. 5/5

Oh wow its really good :) it was simple but straight to the point, well done. Flow was smooth fantastic work!