Girl I Know (Completed)

by DavidBrendan   May 30, 2007


Theres a kind of girl I know,
a kind that makes me smile,
even makes me laugh,
when were so near its like we can never be apart,
shes the kind who makes you question,
how could I have lived without her,
she makes me want to be better,
just for her,
smarter, happier, stronger,
I feel like if shes there
anthing is possible for me,
I've captured her in poetry,
and thought about her in song,
i love her laugh, her smile, and our conversations,
theres a magic about 21 questions,
and for me its meeting that kind of girl,
laying my secrets on the floor,
I'm taking so many risks,
laying out all the pieces of my jigsaw puzzle,
making the picture for someone I've known only for months,
it can feel like if I keep some pieces,
the board under me will break,
then I'll fall in again and this time
I wont be able to bring myself back,
but I've thought about it,
and if I'm dying for someone,
if I should let it all go for someone,
it has to be that kind of girl.

I read this bit over and liked it a lot and figured it could be a poem by itself so I just C+Ped from my unfinished poem so I could have the first part and comments ect to remember. Everyone can comment this one and vote I'd really appreciate the feedback :)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Well, if i'm being honest. I dont think this one flowed too well, maybe if it was broke itnto stanza's it might sound better, but thats your choice.
    I did like this one and i felt the emotion, 4/5 on this one, my friend
    best wishes,
    Tara-Kay

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    I liked this one...it had lots of emotions through out and ...the whole poem stands out well and has it's charm
    It's very well penned
    Good job on this one!

    5/5
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by uwouldntno

    This is a great poem...I hope you can stay with "that girl" she sounds very special to you...the best of luck to you wit the poetry and the girl

    sincerely yours,

    uwouldntno

  • 16 years ago

    by AMoreMIo

    I like your poem...it shows feeling.. its always good to look at someone for who they are...like this girl you talk about...real good..keep it up