Eyes of a raven

by firexdancer   May 30, 2007


White stretching across forever
cramped inside an orb of dew
blind eyes seeing all the universe
life is something new

breaking all the boundaries
striving to be free
chipping away at the white shell
finally able to see

so small compared to the world
afraid of what's to come
wings to wet to open
waiting for the sun

hunger is an element
food is needed to survive
days passing in oblivion
at least you are alive

strong enough to try now
all are born with flight
jumping off the edge
hope to be alright

falling is so beautiful
forever into dark
spread your wings and soar
on the world you've made your mark

visions of the planet
as it sinks into cold death
treasure now forever
sweet air with every breath

conquer all your enemies
fight to share you're haven
die singing your song of light
through the eyes of a raven

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  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh I just loved the imagery in this .. it was flawless. You described each detail with such thought and beauty that was left speechless at the end. It was short sweet and got your point across with a wonderful choice of vocabulary. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Tabitha

    Ahh amazingly beautiful. keep writing, and ill keep reading! 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    "wings to wet to open"
    ^^ too wet to. . .

    Okay, darling. . . I mean wow. Lmfao. You're an amazing poet.
    No lie, it's amazing.

    All of your poems have this flow to them, and this like flawless feel.

    It's amazing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Strong enough to try now
    all are born with flight
    jumping off the edge
    hope to be alright

    falling is so beautiful
    forever into dark
    spread your wings and soar
    on the world you've made your mark
    ^This two stanzas are incredibly written, I love it! It has great flow and you created powerful rhythm. Good topic, it is positive. And the third stanza is excellent, it really deserves 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    I like the theme. It was actually one of the <better> nature poems that I've read ON this site. Perceiving the world through the eyes of a raven is quite intriguing, though I'd like to know more about its own perception. On the whole, this piece is of great promise to be enhanced in the future.

    Nice work, nonetheless. A good read. =]

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