Another Dream

by Vanessa   May 31, 2007


Romantic place
Pretty face
Long hair
Body bare
Bathed in moonlight
Special night
Slow touch
Means so much
Passionate kiss
Delightful bliss
Bodies together
One forever

Long hall
faint call
Turns away
Nothing to say
Icy stare
No where
Such grief
Sweet leaf
Stale smoke
Twisted joke
Sad grin
Pain held within

She's late
Oh great
Desperate prayer
No one there
Secret kept
She wept
Stopped him
Eyes dimmed
One time
Not mine
Slight touch
Hurt so much

Scream and shout
Kicked out
On the street
Nothing to eat
She cried
Dreams of suicide
Moves on
Everything gone
Baby birth
Tainted earth
Mother's scream
Another dream

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  • 15 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    I agree with those commenting before me. this was very well written and you chose the right words and placed them perfectly. Nice work here.

  • 15 years ago

    by your love is mine

    Wow this poem is really good there was alot of emotion=)

  • 16 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    This poem was excellent.i can relate to it very well.
    i just love the way you have written it.the imagery was perfect and the flow was good.i espically love this stanza

    Long hall
    faint call
    Turns away
    Nothing to say
    Icy stare
    No where
    Such grief
    Sweet leaf
    Stale smoke
    Twisted joke
    Sad grin
    Pain held within

    She's late
    Oh great
    Desperate prayer
    No one there
    Secret kept
    She wept
    Stopped him
    Eyes dimmed
    One time
    Not mine
    Slight touch
    Hurt so much

    i just love the way you have written this stanza.keep up the good work and hope we stay in touch
    best wishes
    and take care
    emmeline

  • 16 years ago

    by Krzysztof J

    Wow its short and perfect trully a work of art i have it 5/5 :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I like how you broke this up so there were only two or three words in each line, and how you managed to make it rhyme at the same time. The flow was a bit off at most parts, but I can't blame you since the rhyme and syllible sceme caused that to happen.