The most orignal sad poemI have read in a while. I doubt it could have been written without the experience. I could feel the sadness of percieved rejection. good work

"She could never be like me, and thats something i know you know"

i love this line..maybe because i can relate...you give everything and end up with nothing in return, its a terrible position to be in, and this poem expresses that...amazing work..7/5!!

That was a very emotional poem your very talented and i can relate to your poem i just went through a break up and it sucks 5/5 awesome poem

Your poem was excellent! The phrases where original and fit good in the poem. I liked the lines

"Love me and leave me, that's the name of the game,
except i loved you, and you loved what's her name"

It flowed well and was very clever. The whole poem is very creative. I enjoyed reading this piece, a ton. It was very well written. Definitely 5/5

Wow!..this one is so sad...so touching..
You've expressed emotions well and very deeply...

"You were my first and last love, what more can i say,
I always dreamed of love, but i never thought i would end this way."
^^Wow!..really touching powerful.

Kp up the good job!

5/5
xxPoojaxx

Wow. This was SO amazing. I usually ont like this kind of setting out and wouldnt read it, but i just couldnt stop. I love it. It was so wonderfully written. Well done. Xx Chrissie

I really liked it. Somethings you could fix:
The flow is a off.
Maybe if you used brock the stanza up into more than one it would help with the flow.
Also if you shorten the sentences that would help make it easyer to read and it would help with flow.
I gave it a 5/5.

Wow...so much emotion in so many simple words. I like the dialect form you used for this. 5/5

Not bad at all i really like the end part and especially

Because i remember someone told me when i was a little kid,
There's no past tense with love, you either do or you never did.

mind if i put it as a quote of course ill say it came form you :)

anyway really good stuff there

I really, really like this. I'm not even going to mention the mistakes, because the wording, IMO, was just wonderful. I would have preferred the style if it was put into stanzas, but seriously, this was well written.

Good job.

Original I liked it. The structure though hun was blinding I struggled so much reading this which disappointed me as I was enjoyed reading this. The ending was great definitly capturing just fix the structure try putting stanzas in. Alot easier to read and I'm sure many more would enjoy reading it that way. Good effort. ~mel

Usually i dont like dark poems but this poem was soo good and i felt every emotion in every word this was amazing i just hope that you still dont feel this way

The poem is really deep. I can only imagine what happened. Your an incredbile writer. He was stupid who ever he was