I thought it was great, b/c it was from your heart and it showed in your poem. it was beautiful, i wish you luck, hopefully you will pull through this. beautiful poem.

Oh wow, this nearly made me cry. I absolutely adore it. The emotion is so strong it's hard NOT to feel it yourself. I'm really sorry that you're going through a hard time. *huggles* Stay strong.

The best poems are the ones that are written from the heart. You've done a great job on this as all your poems.
So poignant.
5/5
*Gem*

This is a very good poem marc, i like it and i know how you feel, i give this one a perfect 5/5!!! flawless, thanx for the comment on my poem, keep them coming!!!!

Awwww thats so sad! Very deep, it was beautifully written. The flow and the rhyme was amazing! Its not bad, i think it was wonderful!
Nice work
5/5

Keep Smiling x

A nice poem... I believe people can relate to it... Nice structure and a descent flow... Nothing I can point out as a flaw actually..

Good job =)

Very good, i like when poets write their poems from their heart and really show their emotions in it. Great job, keep it up.

Besides the 3 rhyming words in a row, I really felt your emotion and I really liked the poem. It has metaphors and irony, all the things that help poems along. It's not bad at all.

Keep up with your writing!

~Richi~

It's not that bad, albeit it wasn't my "favorite bar of chocolate." Even so, Poetry is subjective. Thus writing from the heart is rather fine :). As for its contents, I believed further that this piece of work is of great promise. It has the poetic potential to be augmented to a higher degree. (I'd be looking forward to read a revision of this piece as well :].)

Nice work, nonetheless. I hope you all the best and take care.

Debbie Cakes (^^,)

Wow it had alot of emotion in it... and that is what kept me reading it in my opinion emotion is more important then style and this had alot of emotion in it... so i give it a 5/5

This was actually quite good. I found it to be really capturing as you wrote it from the heart. You wrote it and showed you have great abilitys aswel as potential as a poet in the near future. Well done on writing a piece that shows beautifully sad emotions. ~mel

Wow..this is very good poem once again! i cant find anything wrong with it....a 5/5

I could tell you wrote this peice from your heart. So deep and strong where the emotions.
A wonderful write.
And what a captivating read.
Well done,
Elaine.

Very deep emotions, so sad.
You chose the right words.
Like the last lines the most.
Take care!

It was very good b/c it came from the heart and was very emotional. And it good, don't be so hard on yourself. Keep writing well!

This will be my last farewell for you my angel..
I will always and forever love you with all my heart..
"Your love is engraved in my heart, its just beside
The scar you gave me when you broke my heart.."

FAVE LINES ^^

Awww this brought a tear to my eye :'
still enjoyed it! :)

It was so sorrowful and i don't think it's not good..I don't know if you care about it but I guess poetry means expressing your feelings..If you can express your feeelings well in a poem it means you did a masterpiece and you expressed your feelings so well on those in my opinion
So do what you do because you're doing it good
Keep it up,
Laura

Good 5/5
took your challenge and i'm glad i did your poems are really good

Believe it or not dude, its an excellent poem..the best ones are those that come right from the heart...that are "in the moment" kind of thing

"Your love is engraved in my heart, its just beside
The scar you gave me when you broke my heart.."

I LOVE THAT! The ONLY thing I would change to make it a flawless line, because you refered to heart twice..i would try something like "the scar you gave me, when you TORE IT APART"...so it adds that "#$% YOU" into it, great work man!!

WELL I LIKE IT AND I DONT BELIEVE THAT THERE IS ANY RIGHT OR WRONG WAY TO WRITE A POEM BY U BECAUSE ITS HOW U FEEL INSIDE AND THATS WAT I LOVE ABOUT THIS POEM. IT CAME FROM YOUR HEART AND WEN I READ THE WORDS "HELL'S PRISON" I WAS LIKE WOW BECAUSE THERE WAS A TIME WHEN I WAS HEART BROKEN AND DOWN AND DIDNT KNOW HOW TO EXPLAIN AND THEM WORDS RIGHT THERE DID IT ALL. I LOVE IT AND I HOPE EVERYTHING WORKS OUT FOR YOU