This is hilarious because it's so true lmao I always say that when I wake up the next morning "I'm never drinking again" but somehow alcohol always gets the best of me lol Excelent write super funny lol 5/5
Lol you always say it, don't you? And five minutes later you're trying to cure your hangover with a drink. I love this poem so much - because it's entirely true! I quite like waking up with a hangover though, because I know it means I've had a good night the night before.
The rhyming's great and flows really well, but the metre's sometimes a bit off. Also the rhyming seemed a bit forced in this stanza:
Thoughts of yesterday
Shaded by gray
I try to picture,
But no display.
It wasn't entirely clear what you meant because of the way you'd expressed yourself, I had to stop and think for a minute.