The Hunt.

by Idiosyncratic   Jun 20, 2007


If once they waited
Then twice they'll fall
For once they're baited
The traps catch all

The hunt refuses
To end with ease
As the hunted hide
Behind dead trees

But then, from watching
The trees lose faith
Collapse and bury
Scorned, but safe

So now, burdens gone
The hunters leave
Their thoughts so lessened
Lapse to perceive

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  • 15 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I must admit when I first read the title I wasn't sure what I thought. I think that it needs a bit more spice because the hunt is sort of boring and doesn't catch the readers attention. Although once I opened the link I was very glad that I did. This poem is very good. It keeps the readers interested all the way through, its grip getting stronger until the very end. I think that my favourite stanza was the third one. Personifying the trees was a very cleaver thing to do, and doesn't happen to too often anymore on this site. But in doing that you gave the poem that little bit extra that it needed to push it over the edge and stick in the readers mind. Very nice job, just a little fixing of the title and I think that you shall have a winner.

  • 16 years ago

    by BeLLa

    Wow
    this left me speechles
    i loved it
    well written
    you are very talented
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is truly greatly written poem.
    you have done this so greatly, keep it up dear.

  • 16 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    This poem has to be my favorite poem of yours I have read so far. Excellent! Everything about it. It seems to be about a hunt, but it also feels as though it's more then just that... like a metaphor for something I haven't figured out yet...

    Amazing work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I really enjoyed in this one, it's well written.
    First stanza is my favorite, but the rest of the poem is good, too.
    5/5