Comments : A beautiful girl (finished!!!!)

  • 16 years ago

    by Jubb Jubb

    This is a really good poem so far!
    i love it
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by katy

    I really like this poem ssooo good cant wait to read it when its finished x

  • 16 years ago

    by sweetiepie18

    Great start! its going to be amazing when its done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Hmmm..may not be finished but its beautiful so far. you've got talent, make sure you dont waste it and keep writing!
    nuff luv xx

  • 16 years ago

    by x Mo x

    I like it! It sounds amazing the way it is! The flow and the words were purly wonderful! Your poetic talent awes me! I love it! Let me know when you get it finished so I can read the rest.

    ~Morgan~

  • 16 years ago

    by Lethmelodis

    The flow is very nice. Seems to roll along. The rhymes are good. Even though its not finished its still very well constructed. Hope to read the finished version soon : )

  • 16 years ago

    by A New Beginning

    Awesome job so far. I can't wait for the rest of it. I gave it a 5 so far.

  • 16 years ago

    by all because of him

    Wow ur not even done with it and already it is amazing......i cant wait to read the rest:)

  • 16 years ago

    by cobain

    Great work,I can't wait until your done it!

  • 16 years ago

    by CHOKE

    This is my favourite part,
    "A beautiful girl with gorgeous eyes
    a hidden world
    of hurt and lies

    A beautiful smile to hide the pain
    living life
    with nothing to gain

    A pitiful future with dreams of tomorrow
    embracing the world
    with arms of sorrow

    The rotting flesh of a beautiful life
    all once seemed
    so delicate and nice

    A beautiful girl submerged in blood
    hitting the floor
    with a final thud

    A precious soul that didn't last
    a gorgeous girl
    who's life had passed"

    yep, the whole entire thing was amazing. i wouldn't change a thing.

  • 16 years ago

    by all because of him

    Amazing i love it even more now thats its done....i think ur one of the best sad poem writers on here...i cant wait to see more of ur poems 5^5:)

  • 16 years ago

    by DepthofPassion

    This is my favorite one..so far. I could really picture this sad and lonely girl.Bravo!..5/5

    Brit

  • 16 years ago

    by What A Beautiful Lie

    This poem is really beautiful.

  • Wow this one was amazing ^_^ loved the flow and the rhyme scheme. Beautiful write, keep up the greatness.
    love muches -Cutie

  • 16 years ago

    by Sophia

    I love the last lines, reminds me of how much people suffer and how many suicides there are and people not knowing what went wrong in their lives because they never once asked what was wrong. excellent poem, excellent.

  • 16 years ago

    by STEVE

    Well done , very meaningful with a sad ending 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by beautifulybroken

    This was one of my favorites...i absolutly love it. it's amazing

  • 16 years ago

    by sweetiepie18

    Well done! you should be really really proud!

  • 16 years ago

    by ♥ Nobody ♥

    Wow...I really like it! :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Viola

    This poem is short..but beautifully written. i love the emotion portrayed here..it's very real and deep. i loved reading this poem. great job! =]