One thing ill always do
by sammie Jul 3, 2007
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Baby, i said i wud never fall in love, but meeting you was changed my life for gud. for everything i did, for telling you wen we werent together, i appolise a thousand times. but them 3 words are still tru, and u know i will always luv you. |
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14 years ago
Well im not going 2 tell u how 2 do poem cause i think its perfact da way it is. u should have a 5/5 on this but i dont no y tat other person gave u a 3/5.
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14 years ago
"Baby, i said i wud never fall in love, but meeting you was changed my life for gud."
All your "i"s in this poem should be capitalized, its just proper grammar.
"wud" should be "would".
Delete "was" before "changed".
"gud" should be "good".
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"for everything i did, for telling you wen we werent together, i appolise a thousand times."
"wen" should be "when".
"werent" should be "weren't".
"appolise" should be "apologize".
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"but them 3 words are still tru, and u know i will always luv you."
"them" should be "those".
"tru" should be "true".
"u" should be "you".
"luv" should be "love".
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"but now i no ur my friend, a relationship that wont end,"
"no" should be "know"
"ur" should be "you're".
"wont" should be "won't".
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"so with my head held high, ill try not to cry, but baby, baby dont ask me to be sorry for luving you, its the one thing ill always do."
"ill" should be "I'll".
"dont" should be "don't".
"luving" should be "loving".
Overall, 3/5 from me. I feel like a lot of work can be done, there was not much emotion or creativity shown, and you should always use spell check. This poem was very hard to read and understand.
Take care and God Bless!
~MaryAnne
