Comments : Will I always love you?

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    -Sometimes when my tears fill my eyes- I would write that like this: - Sometimes when THE tears fill...- You should avoid the repetition of one word in the same line.
    "When your love hurts me inside
    and every thing seems blue.
    I talk with my silence,
    Will I always love you ?"
    ^ This is my favorite stanza, it's greatly written.
    I like the ending of the poem, and the choice of words was excellent.
    I enjoyed in this one very much.
    I'll give you 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by JodiieBaybeh

    That is also my favorite stanza but i loved this poem as a whole..it had such feeling ! and it was writing with deep feeling ..lovely peice of work ...thank you for your commentx and keep up the good work its really good x

  • 16 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    This poem made me speechless really great piece of work from u...Great job!!!
    5/5
    I like this stana:

    When your love hurts me inside
    and every thing seems blue.
    I talk with my silence
    Will I always love you ?

    God bless u!

  • 16 years ago

    by Robin

    That poem is absolutely stunning. everything about it was beautiful and perfectly written... 5/5 for sure
    <3Robin

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    I really like this poem. At some points though there were the simple joining words missing though, which made it hard to read. But other than that I like it alot. It shows a lot of emotion, and I like the metaphoric sort of phrases you used in there. Well done. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    Beautiful poem, filled with emotion. Great job once again and keep up the good work =)

  • 16 years ago

    by Taz

    Wow that was a fantastic poem its its a top job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Well if you are alone, that means you are not with the person so why would you love someone your not with, unless you are talking about a family member or somthing, i dont know its just the way that you worded it made me think different, but otherwise i thought it was a good poem and it didnt seem forced and the flow was great, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by K3LSI3

    Wow...great job.after i read it it made me speechless.again great job.i enjoyed reading this.

  • 16 years ago

    by jyzka

    "When your love hurts me inside
    and every thing seems blue.
    I talk with my silence,
    Will I always love you ?"

    I can really relate with this stanza...
    your poem is full of emotion...
    Job well done.. keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Hassan
    This was great. Lots of emotion in your words.

    In the noises of this world,
    among thousands of people,
    I am all alone.
    And wondering,
    will I always love you?

    I can relate to these lines. Feeling alone even when you are with others.
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Very emotional it is easy to relate to. Great job. Keep it up! 5/5

    Days are converting in months
    Months will change in years
    Years will make big distance

    So much meaning in these lines. MY fave ^^

  • 16 years ago

    by StormyStar

    I love your emotion your talented i love the style you write with also! keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Well written, few grammer errors and or other words that could have helped flow alot better, but overall a good write. thinking if you will always love some one can be a hard and troublesome thought. i know i ponder on it all the time.
    nice subject.

    (: Tom

  • 16 years ago

    by WiNgS Of StEeL

    Wow..this is poem is so raw and has so many emotions through it..i just love it ...and it has great flow aswell
    nver stop writing:D
    hope to read mre soon
    bree x

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I liked this purely because i could relate. It flowed well, had good imagery and brought tears to my eyes. keep writing
    xxxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I think it was great poem.. It reminded me of someone special to my heart.. She promised me that she will always love me.. But er.. Nevermind..

    I really love the ending of the poem..

    Days are converting in months
    Months will change in years
    Years will make big distance
    Wondering, will I always love you?
    ^^My favorite Stanza..

    You deserve a 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Devon

    Beautiful. The only word that could describe such a work of art. The words flow together in soft rythm, gliding onto the page like soft petals from a nearby tree. The ink of gentle words sinking into your skin and piercing the tenderness of your heart. Warmness fills every inch of my soul like someone just lit a candle. Ah. Such beauty, can only be described in emotions no words can describe it. :] I adore it. --Devon.

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Kirmani, wow what a beautiful poem with wonderful thoughts in it. The flow and the words are really catching. The imagery dipicted in this poem is so clear and very realistic.
    All the way it is great with real poetic quality. 5/5 for sure

    Yours reader
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is beautiful.
    Elegantly written, touching and moving, and so heartfelt all at the same time.
    I found the opening to be powerful, it pulled me right in and the imagery you portrayed was beautifully done.