I'm Sorry That You Have to Live Like This

by K3LSI3   Jul 4, 2007


Theres this girl.
Everyone loves her.
Everyone wants the life that she has.
She has a huge house close to the beach.
The wardrobe all girls would die to have.
The most expensive cars the boys want to drive.
This girl has everything.
But no one sees what happens when the lights go out.
Her fathers a drunk and always beats her.
Her mothers an addict that always criticizes her about her weight.
The only person she confides in is her brother.
He knows what shes going through.
He's been there too.
Cutting is the only thing that keeps this girl sain.
Everyone wants to live her life.
They think it's so perfect.
But they don't know that she would give up
all the designer clothes,the expensive cars,the big house
just to have loving parents that didn't beat her
and cause her so much pain.

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  • 16 years ago

    by handsome

    Kels, kels...your writing moves me so much i have to hold back tears...sweety u know i will always be there for u ok...i love your writing cos u bring them from your heart...so beautiful...i miss u and keep writing...pls don't hurt yourself ok...i give this 5

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Good poem i felt like a was reading a story

  • 16 years ago

    by Raychil

    I really liked it. It was in fact very strong and very deep. Filled with emotion that most would have to experience themselves. The only critique (and don't think I'm being mean cuz I don't want to come off that way, I have a lot to work on myself) I have to make is that you're telling a story more than writing a poem, and yes, stories are very good to tell in poems, but you still need to hold the poems stability, keep a solid flow is all. But you're very creative and have a lot of talent, keep it up.
    <3Raych

    Thanks for the comment on my poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Rather pointed. Words that're not flowery but straight-forward, to the point, and no nonsense gives this piece its power. Strangely I've written something vaguely similar about not knowing how that other person's life might not be better...can't remember what it's called though. Moving on. In a way I kinda think you don't need the two last lines but whatever it does work. Nice write and topic. Love how the words are simple yet effective.
    ~Faith-less

  • 16 years ago

    by Chantal

    Loved this poem.
    it was really touching for me because that's almost what my life is like.
    minus the beach house and designer clothes..
    and instead of a brother for me it was a friend.
    so this poem i really enjoyed reading,
    great words,
    clean and to the point.
    you're an amazing writter.
    just on mistake and that was at the end the word "there" was the wrong one.
    but no big deal.

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